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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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-emulsion side down- I'd love to watch you destroy yourself. You can only brag about survival for so long Before it becomes hoary, mundane. Would you like to weep in my ear Or pull the trigger? Your life is like a torn slide, Exploding fragmented, layered light on the screen. You're too concerned with its shape, its borders, To forgive us the voyeurism of attention, Masticated sympathy. You're too late to forgive yourself. Much too late to be unique. What holds your life together? Glue, masking tape, Dye transfers, Our eyes watching you fade. The frames burn, one by one. Just another square in a whole jumped reel Of xerox blueprint serenades. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Ouch. wow. i am so confused tonight. Just hoping it wasn't ME that pissed you off. If "powerful" is now cliche', you'll just have to tolerate it. Or not. What ever you say. I'm agreeing with you here... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
serenity, Rest assured, it's not you. I'm just going through a mind transition right now, I guess. Very confusing. But glad you read, and, if you didn't enjoy, at least were affected. Mike |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I am wiping sweat from my brow...thought I offended you with the "borrow"...(nothing has no edge...) whatver it is, whatever it was, I hope all will be better. AFFECTED ME? incredible...(applauding very quietly...) |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Now, now, serenity, I might only be 23, but I'm more mature than THAT. If I were mad at you, I'd let you know; not veil it in a poem. Like I already said in "alchemy," I'm touched that you think enough of my work to use a title quote. In short: no harm done. Mike |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
"Would you like to weep in my ear Or pull the trigger?" ...cool line, Mike. Actually cool poem, through and through. Wish I could do free verse anywhere close to you. Claire |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Claire, Again, thanks for taking the time to read my poems. And your poems are sooo good, why would you need to emulate anyone else?  You rock!Mike |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
wow powerful is the best way to describe this...if you take the last 2 lines of every verse, you would describe my 2 days of war this week...you would describe me...or my perception of me.....and since I know you aren't mad at me either it just goes to show your talent...great work |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Hope y' got through that bad time, Corazon. Ah miss y'.She said burn ... together. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 God! |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I was not very happy. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
hope you're happy now, at least a little happier than you were back here |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Most definitely! |
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