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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Does he look into your eyes The way I did when you cry? Maybe it can be that I feel worse That our parting was on purpose Hope can be a temporary comfort When the future doesn’t hold you in it I can’t explain why you touched me For a time, the memory, I can’t see I never go a day without some thought Of you and the lessons you taught I know you must dream sometimes And though they may be crimes; I’ll steal all that I can And I’ll be back again and again Because I know you don’t look in his eyes Like you did when you looked in mine It’s a small sacrifice that I pay It’s a great loss that I bear today |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
I really liked the flow of this poem. It's very apparent that this person means a great deal to you. I hope they only know it. Keep up the good work.  |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Strong words - hope your message wil be heard. 'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wonderful poem, JML! Denise |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
JML~ this is so full of love. It is also very sad. I really liked it! You write so good. -SEA |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
"Hope can be a temporary comfort When the future doesn’t hold you in it I can’t explain why you touched me For a time, the memory, I can’t see I never go a day without some thought Of you and the lessons you taught... Because I know you don’t look in his eyes Like you did when you looked in mine It’s a small sacrifice that I pay It’s a great loss that I bear today" WOW!!!!...how did I miss this one...I must be slipping in my stalking skills (can you ever forgive me)  anyway...needless to say...I REALLY was effected by this ones emotions...you write with a quality of aching passion in your words...these are my favorite kind... so now that I've told you this...you know what to do, right?(smile) stalk ya later, gator ...there are places inside all our souls... that have never been touched... there are places inside our hearts... that need to be loved this much... Janet Marie *I miss you baby... I love you, always.* |
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