Open Poetry #6 |
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Places that no one ever Touched |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California ![]() |
(A friend sent me a CD of Lorenza Ponce and I wrote this while listening to her music) Places that no one ever Touched If only I could breathe deep enough to absorb all this sound that scratches my ears persisting I open for assimilation then floats on wings above me allusive and yet sure Tap-taping still against this heart a sound like time itself backing angel heat that has no flame is cold yet warm and then you can almost feel the wind in the heavens zapping around mountain angles and the soft tinkle and harmony follows as sure of direction as this minute It is the sound of life where humanity dances and looses itself in the rhapsody of movement and swaying and the voice is the instrument the instrument the voice playing upon each other like lovers I want to dance this joy my feet in perfect points my hands like butterflies and think this song comes from my heart and pleases all the small and lonely with listening I feel this lover’s caress on skin that is slipping into rhythm as sensual as a sigh and if I close my eyes I can be magic and this invisible partner will tell me secrets and will show me places that no one ever touched |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Very nice! I also like to write while listening to music. Sets the mood if you know what I mean. Always enjoy reading your poetry! Danny |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
Well Deary Would you just lie back here on my couch, relax and tell me all about these magical invisible partners. How long have you been like this..? LOL!!!! I like verry much. Sometimes though... I wonder how close I should let another get close to those places. Much Love from both of us. |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Martie:...Superb!!!...I'm sitting here smiling cause there's nothing quite like a violin when played so superbly and you're collecting your thoughts.. ![]() HUGS Ouvrir mon coeur et âme |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
The first two lines said it all for me--it's so hard to describe the sensation of music-- but you did. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This makes me want to go out and buy the CD. It sounds wonderful. You, Martie are a joy, and so are you, Rainbow Liz |
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Marge Tindal![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ I feel the music coursing through this rendering. Superbly done. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Beautiful! Oh, this sings to me like a song. Lovely imagery. Breathtaking feeling. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
I want to dance this joy my feet in perfect points my hands like butterflies and think this song comes from my heart and pleases all the small and lonely with listening All I need to say is: Do you mind if I print this work of art my friend? ![]() 'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Very nicely done! |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
I am a rock and roller...lol...and so have not learned to enjoy that kind of music, but have the new Santana Cd that has some beautiful guitar playing...I turn it up loud in my car and drive...the guitar talks, it soothes...it keeps me company....your poem is beautiful...thank you ![]() and martie, I saw your comment on my missing you poem...and yep...I knew as soon as I read yours...kindred souls...big hugs lady [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 02-24-2000).] |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Danny--yes, I know what you mean. Thanks for the enjoy. Lucky dear--I've always been this way, you can get as close as you want to your own imagination. Much love back to you and R. RG--thank you for the superb and especially for the hug. serenity--I'm so glad you think I suceeded with what I was trying. Liz, to give you joy makes me very happy. I think you would like this CD. Marge-- So glad you could feel it. Hi Rosemary--thank you so much for reading and for your kind words. Kamla--For you to want to print this has made my day and of course you can. Whtdove--thanks for reading Corazon--I like rock and roll too, and Santana is wonderful. Thank you so much for the beautiful. Looking forward to more of yours. Hugs back |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Wow! What an absolutely profound poem about life! Fantastic! Corinne |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Absolutely beautiful, Martie!! ![]() Denise |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Truly beautiful..it is indeed hard to describe the sensation, the emotion music brings forth. You've done a superb job. This definitely makes me want to hear this music! *Krista Knutson* "Every moment marked with apparitions of your soul...." ~*Sarah McLachlan- Do What You Have To Do*~ |
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