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Wine and roses
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Wine and roses |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Wine and roses Sitting quiet, plucking whimsy, From a daisy soft and flimsy, Watching sparrowing shadows spew, My mind did conjure up a coup. I would send an invitation. Full of dares imagination. A moonlit tete-a-tete for two. With roses and champagne of brew. Surrounding a small pagoda. One fumed with exotic odor. An aggregate, an omnibus. Were we would be alone, just us. And I would shape the world anew. Whispered in a mellow coo. Touch you with raptures traces, Hold you in my strong embraces. And we would ship on Noahs Ark, To Edenville, then disembark. |
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Betty Gravitt Member
since 1999-09-11
Posts 222Georgia United States |
"And I would shape the world anew." "Hold you in my strong embraces." Then a trip to Edenville, what more could a person want in this world? I like the poem, but this ending is my favorite, because it's not and ending. It's a promise of a new begining. I like this idea. < !signature--> B Gravitt [This message has been edited by Betty Gravitt (edited 02-21-2000).] |
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January Flowers Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 209South Carolina |
So when is it that I can expect my invitation? You make it sound like such a pleasant date! Love the soothing flow of this one. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Betty, Yes it's an ending without an end. Thank you Betty. January, Thank you January, you read like allot of fun. Enjoyed your answer. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sy, A sensual poem , every part From tete a tete to disembark Your words have touched an acute sensation Surpassing all imagination Love ya, Liz |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Just too beautiful Sy. One of the ones which produces a sound very much like the sound of your name!  K'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Excellent writing, Sy...but wouldn't it smell a little on that Ark? I mean, all the animals and all, two by two, shuffling around...big eleph......uh, excellent writing, Sy |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lovely Sy, this date you've planned if you want music, I'll be the band. As far as the ark I have to say I'd rather play beside the bay. Great poem Sy! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Your comments are more beautiful than my poems. Love Sy Severn, You are sweet, thank you and *L* Balladeer, I was thinking more along the lines of a pagoda for two. Thanks Martie, Love your comments, they almost always give me a chuckle. *L* |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Beautiful and lovingly sentimental writing, Seymour. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very romantic, Sy! *sigh* Denise |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Meadow, Enjoyed your comment, thank you. Denise, Thank you for the sigh, Sy *L* |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
This is very beautiful Sy you are a romantic arent you much enjoyed |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
You've managed to flutter this heart yet again Sy...this was quite the secluded story of romance!!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Whiskey, Guilty to the romantic, but glad you enjoyed. *L* Denise, But it was a nice flutter. *L* Sy |
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