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I Can't Dive Deep Enough
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I Can't Dive Deep Enough |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow 
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I Can't Dive Deep Enough I can't dive deep enough to reach you, I try yet you retreat further from my arms grasp. I'll save myself the agony by standing on the shore, hoping one day you'll need a breath of air and see me from the distance realizing I do care. The choice juggles itself within your hands, always seems yourself is the final stand. I'm laying here yet you don't seem to notice, oblivious to the love we once had, as the love of escaping reality controls your mind. |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
What can I say about Lost Dreamer's words that has no been said before? Another great one? Or perhaps, I feel these words in my soul, have lived these words in my short life, and hope that I will never have to live them again. It's so very painful to be on the shore. Wonderful, Lost Dreamer, wonderful. |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
sonjes:I don't know what to say, you've thrown me for a loop with your kind compliments.I thank you from the depths of my heart. [This message has been edited by Lost Dreamer (edited 02-21-2000).] |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
I don't need to tell you that I can completely relate to this one. great poem Gloria about a very helpless feeling, not being able to reach in to someone's heart, not being able to rekindle the fire that once burned. Looking into the eyes of someone a million miles away. Sad, but beautiful. Michael |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Gloria...wow, can I ever relate here....wonderful poem my friend  |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Well written, though disturbing, and another that I can understand and share in its theme. You've expressed so well what it is to disappear behind someone's "addiction," whatever it may be. Superb sharing of your talents. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Another beautiful expression from the heart, Gloria! I too can relate to standing on the shore. I think there is always a purpose though.....we may not see it now but someday maybe. Again, great poem!! Denise |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Michael: Thank You, you really got me with "looking into the eyes of someone a million miles away" That's so much what it seems like. Ruth: Thank You Meadowmuse: Thank You dsnyder: Thank You Times heals all, and he will be healed by his own power of realization, I will always stand by him, just now I'll be on the shore waiting instead of sinking him deeper. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Good thoughts here, Dreamer....and it's not only important that they come to you, but that they come to you while you still care.... |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
I feel the longing here...  I hope he comes up soon....and finds you still waiting...  )wonderful poem Lost Dreamer... I love the time and in between the calm inside me in the space where I can breathe... Sarah McLachlan |
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One Who Understands Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 251Cedar Rapids, Iowa |
Beautiful poem |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
beautiful emotions expressed SO well in this one... very nice work! take care, janet marie I love you Is all that you can't say- Years gone by and still... Words don't come easily Like I love you, I love you... But you can say baby... Baby can I hold you tonight Maybe if I told you the right words At the right time you'd be mine... Tracy Chapman |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Gloria no better way to express than from the heart! You did just that. Excellent! |
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