Open Poetry #6 |
Degrees of rhythm... |
Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Locked in an embrace Limbs here and there Moving in intimate rhythm... Fingers exploring coastlines roaming peaks and valleys mountains shifting against plains in pleasurable tremors... Casting steamy glances foreheads meet in a salty kiss as their eyes lock trembling lips inches apart … A trickle down her nape his tongue yearns to steal Pulling her against him hard contours to pliant softness... They move together swaying a lovers dance Hearts pounding erotic rhythms… Slowing reluctantly as their song ends Lingering gentle release breathing eases to normal… Strangers on a dance floor they drift away from each other their moment of sweet rhythm already forgotten as they scan the shadows for a new partner before the next dance begins... I love the time and in between the calm inside me in the space where I can breathe... Sarah McLachlan |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Wow, At first I thought this was posted in the wrong forum, and it turns out to just be a dance,but what a dance. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wow....I'm with Gloria on this one....geat twist in the end, extreamly well written, great imagery |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
wow will ditto both of the above lol....great images, great poem...I have always wondered how 2 strangers people can dance so intimately...and go on to the next....wow |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Phew! LOL - great work! 'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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freckles Member
since 2000-02-12
Posts 160Virginia USA |
Just BREATHE.......and ditto (or tritto or whatever the case may be) to all of the other comments. I enjoyed this, Breathe. |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
I guess the beginning IS a bit misleading...Hehe~ But I was thinking about that the other night...while out...watching all the folks dancing...passing each other around... Dancing can be so intimate....and I kind of likened it to a relationship...and how partners come and go... Thank you everyone! I love the time and in between the calm inside me in the space where I can breathe... Sarah McLachlan |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I think I want to go dancing. Wonderful poem! |
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Brent Hotchkin Junior Member
since 2000-02-15
Posts 42Florida,USA |
I agree with Martie. You've talked me into it Breathe. You did have me on quite a different track for a munite there. But you captured the intamacy of a dance perfectly. Will be looking for more of your work. Little Tree |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Whew! Who turned up the temperature in here! This is good Breathe. Fabulous ending! Denise |
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bobbycat Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 233USA |
Loved it, loved it, loved it! Bobbycat =^..^= ~~Blessed Be!~~ |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This was sensual and sexy...for being a dance and all!!! I thought it was gonna be this good just from the title, And I beleive I was right!!! This was more than GOOD!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
I think the temperature hike is due to my blushing here....*smiling* Martie...I'm ready whenever you are... Brent...*grin* As I will yours...Thanks! Denise...I did! Hehe~ and thanks... Shank you bobby cat! Devina...Well thank you very kindly...Your poem was a bit steamy too...*grin* and I liked it alot! I love the time and in between the calm inside me in the space where I can breathe... Sarah McLachlan |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice. Slow dances can be very erotic. James |
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