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Moonlight sadness... |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Pale moon wonder graces the night her elegant form gliding silently in sultry dance among the stars Gentle light luminous seducing all that gaze upon her... Ice particles hidden in a wintry breeze float through the night air drawn to a huddled form Shrouding her hair in a frosty veil coating damp lashes with snowflakes... The woman shivers hugging her knees closer She sinks further into the chair cold plastic biting into her naked arms She takes a long drag on her only warmth embers glowing..then fading exhaled in a clouded sigh Tears flow freely in lunar glow gliding translucence reflected in unearthly beauty She gazes sadly upon the moon looking through to another time when shimmering light fell soft upon a trembling body Moonlight embracing sadness echoing haunted eyes trapped within a distant memory... Freedom of expression is the watch word... |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Breathe, this paints such a sad and beautiful picture. Very nice.  -SEA |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Thank you SEA...*smiling* Freedom of expression is the watch word... |
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bobbycat Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 233USA |
Wow....I could actually see the woman, feel her chills....you paint such an excellent picture with your words. Great job. Bobbycat =^..^= |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
I'd have to say this is one of the best free verse poems I've read in quite some time. Lovely imagery here. Well done!!  |
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Majestic Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 264houston, tx. |
Wow..what imagery....I can still see the breath as it steams from her mouth...excellent.. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Breathe~ Ahhhhh ! You've been in touch with a wonderous muse in this one. This is a beautifully image-ladened piece of your heart. Powerfully alive with feeling. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Beautiful poem Breathe~, I loved it. I get a real sense of lonliness from this. I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Wonderful imagery! You brought it alive in my world! Very well done! <*\\\>< When you can't make up your mind Which way is right for you, Stop and softly ask yourself, What Would Jesus Do? |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Bobbycat...Thank you...  )Sally...Wow!...what a wonderful compliment! Thanks... )Majestic...and the chill in her heart...thank you... )Marge...Not only do you have the most wonderful poems...you have wonderful comments too...I love just seeing your name...cuz I know something good is coming... )Thank you Mistikman...are you going to be posting some more poems with us? I hope so..I am looking forward to it... )WhtDove...from my world to yours...Thank you... )Freedom of expression is the watch word... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Beautiful Imagery |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Wonderful poem! Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin* |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Very sad indeed Breathe... you painted the scene well and I commend your effort. I bow to you and yours... and the lady in the snow. |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Thank you Hoot and Echo... )Andrew...I am no longer the lady in the snow...that was an effort in itself... ) Thank you for your comments...Freedom of expression is the watch word... |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Some very delicate and nicely crafted imagery here...I really enjoyed reading this! Claire |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Thank you Claire!... )Freedom of expression is the watch word... |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
WOW what a picture I see in your words....awesome |
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