Open Poetry #6 |
Please Help me Finish This Poem Sugestions And Coments Welcome. |
PREACH Junior Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 20 |
THE MAKE UP OF A MAN HOW MUCH IS A GOOD ONE WORTH? WE ALL EITHER STRIVE TO BE ONE OR OBTAIN ONE FROM BIRTH. DOES HE HAVE ALL YOU NEED, OR DO YOU NEED ALL HE HAS? AN EASIER QUESTION TO ANSWER THAN TO ASK? WHAT'S THE TASK? IS IT SHOWING THE LOVE, OR LOVING TO SHOW? KNOWING THE RIGHT TIME TO KNOCK AT THE DOOR WITH MORE. MORE THAN JUST FLOWERS AND CANDY HE BOUGHT FROM THE STORE, MORE THAN WHAT HE DID FOR THE GIRL NEXT DOOR. NOT LETTING HIS GOAL BE TO GET BETWEEN YOUR THIEGHS, BUT TO SEE, RECOGNIZE AND UNDERSTAND THE FIRE IN YOUR EYES IN HOPES THAT YOU WILL ABLIGE AND TAKE OFF THE DESCIZE LACED WITH LIES THAT YOU USED ON OTHER GUYS. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Welcome dear...I'll get back to you with and ending...but you've got a good idea going none the less!!!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Welcome aboard, Preach. Only a couple suggestions - check yer spellin', as dere's peeple in here who spell real gud - lol. My only other suggestion is to include in your poem something about how all us men hate cats *g*. (Don't worry. As you get to know me, you will come to understand my comment about cats). I think you have a great idea going here - keep at it. |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
welcome to passions... Just be glad I'm not your child! *evil grin* |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Welcome Preach, I also agree that this is worth pursuing( both the poem and the subject).Asking the questions may not always get you the answer you want , but it's a start . Doc |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Welcome to passion The subject is a touchy one There are no easy answers I think The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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