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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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Here's a poem I wrote a while back, after my girlfriend of two years broke up with me. This was writing as catharsis: a lot of angry poems would come out later (and as you can see in -rain stones-, sometimes still do) but at this moment, I was projecting myself into the future, onto some ideal love someday. Haven't found her yet, but, then again, I'm not looking (for some reason). Anyway, here ya go. Mike -a kiss (tears and sadness optional)- Shhh. Hear that? That's my heart. A gentle muscle pumping blood around my body. I like it when we hold hands like this, So the sun comes up between the web of the world's fingers. I like starting each day with a new kiss, a new wish. Mmm...your breath is so soft, sipping coffee smoking cigarettes. I hold a book of poetry and read you a passage about love. Poets will never understand how boring a subject that is. I'll settle for the happiness and closeness of your touch. The watchwords and hidden messages in your lips, The way your eyes act like gentle diamonds reflecting the floating light. I'll sit out here with you all day, until god closes one eye and opens the other, Turns his head to watch us together. I'll fall asleep with you asleep against me, Your hair brushing my lips -- each strand a touch in the night. Sleep well, my other. Sleep well and on into the day. I whisper: I will tell you everything you'll ever need with my kiss. Brush the sunlight out of your hair, sink against me, And let smoke waver from your lips. You nod your head and close your eyes. For now, we are here. |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
very nice. wonderful you can write so optimistically when in such despair. Great Poem Rich |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
WOW!!!....I love it. OUCH!!..my wife is slapping asking why I can't be so sweet. HMMm...thanks alot. HAHA. THanks for sharing seriously. I loved it. Chris |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This is full of great images Mike...I think you stopped my heart a couple of times along the way...I LOVE THIS!!! I'd surely swoon if a man gave me a poem as beautiful as this!!!! And don't worry about finding the right one...with passion such as lovely as you've written here, they're sure to be running!!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
yep this is the stuff dreams are made of, yep...sure is *nods her head like she has ever dreamed a dream like this before*.... great work...whew what a contrast to the stuff I read earlier....keep em coming  |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Very nice indeed! 'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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Alias Junior Member
since 2000-02-06
Posts 30 |
great poem mike. i just float away when i think thoughts like these. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Mike~ Wow ! I like. 'I'll sit out here with you all day, until god closes one eye and opens the other' What an image that is. By the way ... when you aren't looking, is just when love will find you.  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Nurse Crachet Member
since 1999-09-27
Posts 318They know where I am! |
How about a dance in the Corner Pub before I'm wisked away (they won't catch me this time)LOL Nice poem, I bet when the feeling is right your words must really mesmorize ones senses. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
spiked, Glad you enjoyed it. The poem is both sweet and sour in my mind (more sweet, though). CMGrimm, But words, no matter how sweet, only get you so far, and I'm sure yr wife realizes that. Thanks for reading. devina, Thanks for feelin' it. Believe me, no one's running.Corazon, Exactly; if I'm not careful with what poems I post, I'm going to blow people's heads up. Severn, Merci. Alias, Do you float away like "gentle diamonds reflecting floating light," or however I worded it? Marge, Thanks for reading, and liking! And c'mon, no hoary old chestnuts allowed for advice. Maybe it's true for almost everybody. 2nd N.C., (rnc?) There's some poems I will never post, though. In fact, those ones are destroyed. Thanks for reading.Mike |
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Nikkisweet Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 183Tx, Dallas |
It's me again. WOW! What a poem. Took my breath away. You are a really good writer. Wish I could write like that.... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Nah, be glad of how you write. I know I like it anyway. How it's simple, yet hides very complex feelings underneath. At least that's what I get out of your writing. I, on the other hand, sometimes get even more complex in my writing than my feelings. Oh well, it makes sense to me. Mike |
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