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What They Seem...... For My Forum Friend
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What They Seem...... For My Forum Friend |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston 
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Somethings in life aren't always what they seem. Sometimes we set our hopes for so much more. We live our lives like some reoccuring dream. Although, we’ve never lived our lives before. Sometimes we set our hopes for so much more. Just trying to find the place where we belong. Although we’ve never lived our lives before. No choice you make in life can count as wrong. Just trying to find the place where we belong. Sometimes we take a risk and grab a star. No choice you make in life can count as wrong. And where you are in life, is where you are. Sometimes we take a risk and grab a star. Yet when we look down all we hold is dust. And where you are in life, is where you are. And living out each moment is a must. Yet when we look down all we hold is dust. The star we grabbed is out of reach again. And living out each moment is a must. To know just where you are and where you’ve been. The star we grabbed is out of reach again. We live our lives like some reoccuring dream. To know just where you are and where you’ve been. Somethings in life aren't always what they seem. With perseverance even the snail reached the Ark. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lucie~ This is just wonderful. I love it when I can find a poem within a poem. The way you used the second line of each stanza to start the next is so refreshingly different. You have done this soooooooo well. It is lovely. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
It's called a Pantoum Marge.. It's really a neat way to write a poem.. you should try it. With perseverance even the snail reached the Ark. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
No choice you make in life can count as wrong...this line grabbed me from my chair Miss Lucie...loved your style here...it's very effective!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Such nice poem and such nice style Say you writting more and hang out with us for a while  Thank you The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Well done! Pantoums are not that easy and you did a great job with this. It also has a good message!  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lucie, I am impressed with your pantoum, You did a wonderful job and with a message. Well done. |
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Lucie Senior Member
since 1999-06-20
Posts 1077Houston |
Thank you all for your replies.. Helmut.. I'm gonna do my best to stick around for a bit. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful pantoum Lucie! Your words are so very true but it does not ease the pain of finding dust in your hands. *sigh*. Glad to see you around a bit more often. I hope you can stay for a while! |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Lucie...this really touched me...thanks girl. You always come through just when I think you've become extinct again...LOL. You have some wonderful ideas pouring out from you - - I'm glad to see you're able to see blue skies now. It won't be long now, before you see your man! Alot of what you said in this beautiful poem really hit home for me. Again, I thank you. hehe What'd you think I'd sound like on the phone?? ROFL  ** I'm reaching for the brightest star I've ever seen - knock my ladder out from under me, and you'll wish you hadn't !! -pFF ** Here's to 2000! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
well said! |
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