»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #6
»
On To Wit's End
| Open Poetry #6 |
|
On To Wit's End |
|
|
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
|
Pleasure, pain & pity lights in blink heart of the city... Hand in grasp, breast to be stroked-- furnace smolders down below. Ashen coal potential--stoked-- promise made... promise broke. Silence. My lips move in jest. Absence. Wish you all the best. Restless. (just like all the rest...) Substance. (May I pass this test...) Mumbling to myself, this prayer: "let it be, just once, I'll swear..." Hope + Bliss + Destiny equals sweet serentiy... I travel, MUST, on to wit's end... Sacred trust I'll find you there. (I will be the one in tears, I'll be the one still waiting here.) |
||
| © Copyright 2000 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Silence. My lips move in jest. Absence. Wish you all the best. Restless. (just like all the rest...) Substance. (May I pass this test...) Mumbling to myself, this prayer: "let it be, just once, I'll swear..." Hope + Bliss + Destiny equals sweet serentiy... I travel, MUST, on to wit's end... Sacred trust I'll find you there. (I will be the one in tears, I'll be the one still waiting here.) ------------------ ooh I LOVE this one...very good...cool poem... when you get to wits end...look for me...i live there...I ll leave a light on for ya  sad but perfect poem of longing sweets. i love the way you write out your thoughts... each poem is like a little glimpse of your hearts diary... love reading your heart (smile) jm |
||
|
tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
This was a captivating poem which I enjoyed reading.  Tracie~ Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
||
|
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Janet Marie--how special you are to me... Your replies are always so touching...thank you from within twin soul... Tracie66-----grateful, first, that you're not Tracie69!---(Keep reading, my life is very complicated!) Much Gratitude to YOu. |
||
|
CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
You've got a great one here serenity...a really cool poem indeed. I truly enjoyed the read. chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
||
|
Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
serenity, I really loved the style in this one and these lines speaks of such wanting passion, I really like...... Hand in grasp, breast to be stroked-- furnace smolders down below. Parker.. |
||
Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
such a wide range of emotion in this piece iit is almost like a journey through my mind Jeffrey |
||
|
Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This is very well written, serenity. Excellent title and exceptional poem.... |
||
|
Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very well done, Serenity. I enjoyed this! Denise |
||
|
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Chris--you have my gratitude...Thanx to you. Parker-hey--thank you also m'friend. And for the record--I wouldn't mind sweet lies from you--anytime at all you feel the call...Thank you for the smiles... Jeffrey C--Great Big crushing Bear Hug! Thank you, gentle man... M'dear Balladeer--always am I humbled by your praise...I bow to you in gratitude. Denise--There you are, making me happy again. For that I'm ever grateful... Lovely love to all.... |
||
|
wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
o man im weary tonite this is such a good poem yuh All Day I Dream About Stanzas!! |
||
|
NamelessOne Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 197Biloxi MS |
Exceptional poem Serenity,i did so enjoy it Great work |
||
|
Jim Hastings Junior Member
since 1999-12-22
Posts 23Arizona |
Very well written, it speaks volumes. It's fantasy. But if it contains a piece of me doesn't that make it as real as I am? |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
