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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap 
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How gently whispering the rain outside these dreaming walls, Where starlit reaches fill the space behind the weeping sky, How distant, now, the pulse of pain that in the darkness calls To that which fades within the place behind my weary eye. How sensual the very air that moves upon my skin; A current stirred by only breath, the ghostly fingers press A lover’s touch upon my hair, and I am caught within A vision of a tender Death surveying his success. How deafening the silence rings when all that’s left to hear Is that which marks the slow defeat of all you’ve ever been; What bitter tune the rhythm sings to this unwilling ear That marks with ever slowing beat the dirge of final sin. How tranquil shall the morning break -- the one I’ll never see -- The world unceasing in its ways, while life moves swiftly on, Unknowing shall the songbird wake to sing its melody While eyes in seeming wonder gaze, unseeing, at the dawn. < !signature--> Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest [This message has been edited by Skyfyre (edited 04-15-2000).] |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
WOW! This is really beautiful writing with a rhythym unsurpassed. Jeffrey |
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netswan Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369Washington |
Sky - simply - pure well written poetry. Thank you -- Teresa King |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
You are gifted, Kess. I know I am being redundant to say this is awesome but I have not words to do this piece justice. Third stanza is a poem in itself. Wonderfully done. Michael |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Exceptionally written. You indeed have a gift. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Wonderful, Kess... Remember - You needn't be answerable to others - You need only please yourself... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
My dear you have a mastery of imagery! This is superb!  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
How perfect is this poem How superb is the flow How talented and gifted you are and now we all know (smile) this poem is pure and exquisite... and leaves me breathless and with quite a case of poet envy as well(smile) exceptional work, always. take care, jm Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders And it makes me want to touch you there. And the light in your eyes makes me feel Like there's something much better out there Something kind... And I know someday I might be looking around Trying to find some purpose Well purpose it can't be that hard to find As long as I've got the wind... The wind and your love to carry me. vertical horizon |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Wonderful Kess (I'm running out of words to describe your pieces these days!!) Your gift for language continues to amaze me. . . excellent!! The heart knows what the mind cannot see. . . --------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
And a poetic "leavetaking" it is. How beautifully sad! Umm, I'm trying to think of things to say here, but my breath was taken away. The rhyme scheme, slow and spaced lent a heavy pall of sorrow that I felt fit perfectly! Wow! |
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hsystems Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 319Murray, UT, USA |
Sky, this is simply breathtaking! A cocophony of rhythm and sensation that is music to my heart!  Troy Beautiful, Thought-Provoking Poetry <A HREF="http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm" TARGET=_blank>http://www.h-systems.net/p1.htm</A> |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Skyfyre, Your writing is impressive And very very expressive. Enjoyed the read. Sy |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent writing, Kess! Denise |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
adding to my library file  |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Great writing Skyfyre... ~coco~ |
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