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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores 
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Thunder rolls within Chasm of earth filled with sound Thunder resounding © ~Marge Tindal~ 2000 |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Marge, Great job!!! The thunder is definitely powerful and awesome. Well said!!! I like it a lot.  Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You're very good at these, Marge! Denise |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
LoneWolf~ Thank you ... yes, it's quite a reverberating experience. Denise~ Thank you. They like me ! Somehow they cause me to look with simplistic clarity at the events of nature. They just intrigue me. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Cassanova Junior Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 39Turlock, Ca. |
Don't know much about haiku, but you sure packed a lot into this little poem!  Jason |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Neato, Marge....  You're really enjoying these - You might consider sharing some with Beki Reese - She's the all time haiku champ... I'm sure she'd love to read yours too.. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Jason~ Thank you. I've sent you an e-mail on the adventures of Haiku-ing ! Enjoy ... and welcome to Passion's. Nan~ Thank you ... I've been reading and commenting on Beki's Haiku. I do enjoy doing these ... they are just so fascinatiing. Thanks for the thoughts. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Thunderous, Marge, Simply thunderous. Great Job. INclan |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
INclan~ Thank you Haiku friend Wonderful greetings you write Haiku is alive It is nice to see your enjoyment. Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Very intriguing Marge....I can smell the rain Jeffrey |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
A stormy experience with this one. Marge the talent you possess just astounds me and these are just fabulous. Tracie~ Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Jeffrey~ Ah, and the prelude To the roar of thunder set Strikes me with wonder Tracie~ Astounding thunder Sent by stormy messenger Roars across the sky *Thank you both for enjoying this and for letting me know. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hold on, O Guru of Haiku! THOR APPLAUDS IN GLEE!!!! i've missed y'much m'mum..... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ Girl .. you bring a ray Of sunshine into my morn Serenity ... me ! ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
a suggestion,Marge...maybe you should use "loud roars" in the first line rather than "thunder"...after all,you have used thunder in the third line and since we all know how valuable words are in haiku,why repeat them? ") a suggestion only...after all,i am only a budding haikuist myself! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
'budding haikuist' Your suggestion of 'loud roars' within sounds to me like it's almost lunch time. (and that wouldn't be a correct 5-syllable count) Now if you meant 'loud roars' rolls within (that would be a tongue twister) Thunder rolls ... and then does it again thusly ... Thunder resounds. Some things just bear repeating to this poets mind. Since we all know it's not the word count that makes the Haiku format ... it's the syllable count, I would think that repetition of a word is most acceptable when it adds to the dimension and clarity of the Haiku. Thank you so much for your kind observations. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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