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But on second thought.......
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But on second thought....... |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
But on second thought…… Aren’t you the one That left me broken-hearted Leaving me shattered So a new life I started But on second thought…. Maybe in your arms Is where I belong Perhaps all this time I’ve been wrong But on second thought…. We did have troubles As couples often do We could bring out the worst in each other You know, that is true But on second thought…. I really did love you With every part of my being Maybe this really is you The NEW you I’m seeing But on second thought I can’t forget Why I said goodbye The pain you caused me Clipping my wings, never letting me fly But on second thought…. Marina Apr. 2000 |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Very good, Marina! This is something that we often go through when we have to let go of someone we love. Your words ring true to the very core of my heart. Very imoressive.....I like this one!  ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Marina, Very touching poem...We all have second thoughts when it comes to love and old flames Just follow your heart (cautiously) Jeffrey |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Marina this is lovely. But on second thought it is precious. Exactly the feelings I have been experiencing for the last year or so over a past relationship. The second thought concerning the pain always wins the battle. Keep writing beautiful message filled poems like this...I need them. James |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Be careful of those second thoughts The deciding factor too often results from undue pressure ... take your time  Rex}>{{{{o> |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Thank you to all of you. I have a very big decision to make and all of your comments and suggestions I'm sure will help. Thank you boys, for your concern. Marina |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Marina-girl... seems to me you've already made your decision...your last several poems have been showing your strength... this one says a lot too of your reservations... we do second guess our hearts dont we...the see-saw of love... Im no one to give advice... I always follow my heart...fall on my face a lot too(smile) sometimes we learn all our lessons the hardway...several times  take care, stay strong jm Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders And it makes me want to touch you there. And the light in your eyes makes me feel Like there's something much better out there Something kind... And I know someday I might be looking around Trying to find some purpose Well purpose it can't be that hard to find As long as I've got the wind... The wind and your love to carry me. vertical horizon |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Marina, I think that you've made your decision too. . . but you can't second guess yourself... you have to go with what's in your heart. . . and find the strength to follow through.. . you can do it, I know... this poem says it all. . . -------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Oh man...the story of my life! You too, 'eh?  Why is it so hard to separate our emotional thinking from our rational thinking? I never can decide which one rules! My head or my heart, which one knows best....? (sigh) Hang in there girl...and yes, take your time! No rush! |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Femme, you and I have got to collaborate on a poem girl. Marina |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Thanks to all Marina |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Second thoughts .... they always get me too .... A very thought provoking piece, Marina ... written with excellence ..... "This is where you will win the battle .... in the playhouse of your mind." Maxwell Maltz |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Pepper, thank you very much for your compliment and post. Marina |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
How totally true to life! Enjoyed the read... |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Nice writing Marina. On second thought, it was better than nice, it was excellent. Think we all have those second thoughts at one time or another. Probably a good thing! |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
-marina this was simply wonderful hon. i sure did relate to this one on many levels! you have a wonderful style of writing that makes every word you write ring so true and heartfelt. hope you make the right decision for YOU. good luck and take care AMY ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Beki,Danny and Amy..thank you all very very much. Amy a special thank you to you. I can't tell you how much I really appreciate your compliments and encouragment. Marina |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Marina, I think there is something about the style of this one that I really like. Its the way you used the title in every verse and made it a perfect ending. Your skill is improving at lightspeed. James |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Thank you James. Your post and your encouragment of my writing means a great deal to me. Thank you for seeing something in me, I never saw in myself. Marina |
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