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for sad-eyed Michele |
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Elliott Junior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 35Chapel Hill, NC |
Oh, that I could blaspheme the mighty In your presence, that it would make you feel better; I’d stand on this mountaintop and With bent brow curse the weather, Forgetting that my life swayed as a tether In the wind. I would that I could buy time in a suitcase, And bring it with me when I come to see you, I’d give it in (earnest) verisimilitude, And you might would come true, And lie down with me For an eternity. That I could one morning find your hair In my drain, it’d be my gain And I wouldn’t clean the &*^%@#$ sink, As its uncleanliness made me think Of you. Please do not think me insane, And if you do, if you decide to be vain and a prude, Think of me as an insane man who sat down And wrote this poem for you. ========================== copyright Apr. 2000 by DEM [This message has been edited by Elliott (edited 04-12-2000).] |
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Elliott Junior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 35Chapel Hill, NC |
nothin'? not a word? |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I would that I could buy time in a suitcase, And bring it with me when I come to see you, I’d give it in (earnest) verisimilitude, And you might would come true, And lie down with me For an eternity. That I could one morning find your hair In my drain, it’d be my gain And I wouldn’t clean the &*^%@#$ sink, As its uncleanliness made me think Of you. --------------- very well written words and emotions really smooth rhyme flow and unique word choices very cool metaphors... you have a creative and unique stlye hows that??  take care jm Well the sun sets gently on your shoulders And it makes me want to touch you there. And the light in your eyes makes me feel Like there's something much better out there Something kind... And I know someday I might be looking around Trying to find some purpose Well purpose it can't be that hard to find As long as I've got the wind... The wind and your love to carry me. vertical horizon |
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Elliott Junior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 35Chapel Hill, NC |
LOL, Janet. you're a sweetie....forgive me, as i can at times demand attention.  |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Elliott~ and demand attention you should. This is very creative and should be noticed! -SEA |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Elliot, Elliot, Elliot. We poets sometimes have need of sleep! Now that we are awake, we read with anticipation your wonderful poem....(I would suggest cleaning the drain though)..that's carrying love too far! LOL I enjoyed this very much.  |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elliot~ Delightfully amusing. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Interesting, well done poem, Elliot. |
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Elliott Junior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 35Chapel Hill, NC |
thanks. [This message has been edited by Elliott (edited 04-12-2000).] |
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