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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap 
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Deeply How deeply lost within in your eyes Once dwelt my raptured soul, When Love would know no compromise Nor rest if less than whole; How deeply my devotion grew When rested on my shrine The graceful vision that was you: No goddess more divine. So deeply felt was ev’ry kiss So sacred each caress -- Such rare perfection shone in this -- No verse could e’er confess How deeply flowed the river swift That raged with love unbound, And washed in purity the gift Of joy in you I’d found. So sure and deeply ran my trust In you, in what we shared, That when your blow was dealt in lust I met it unprepared; So deeply cut the wound you made: It tore my world apart To know the hand which held the blade Had guarded once my heart. So fitting that you were the one To drag my spirit down: For where the waters deeply run, ‘Tis easier to drown. Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Skyfyre, Exquisitely sad. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
"To know the hand which held the blade Had guarded once my heart." Kess, yes exquisite...in both voice, craft and emotion. Such a poignant and searing expression of betrayal and irony. (I was so pleased to see your byline tonight.) ~ Claire |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Kess, you continue to amaze me! Do you have a fan club that I could join? |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Kess, I can feel the pain in this one. . .my heart grieves for you tonight my friend. . . Very heartfelt. . . I always love to see your work. . . but not like this. . . --------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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pen of passion Member
since 1999-08-11
Posts 234 |
Ouch! Excellent poem. |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Thank you, my friends and colleagues, for your kind replies.  Sy: Thank you sir, 'twas as I intended.Claire: Your praise is both welcome and appreciated, for I have a great deal of respect for your talent. Most of all, it is nice to know that I have been missed. Thank you muchly, my friend. Master: You are a one-man fan club! You'd better start building me a bigger house if you plan to keep pumping up my ego like this!  Sven: First off, big HUGS! I've missed you ... Second, as much as I appreciate your sympathy, I'm afraid it is misplaced -- this piece was written for a friend, to whom I fear I have been nearly useless as far as soothing this heartache goes. I only hope this brings with it a bit of the comfort I have been unable to provide ... pen of passion: ouch, indeed. your compliment is well received. --Kess |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Magnificent!!! Wonderful poem...perfect. |
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Jeffrey Carter
since 2000-04-08
Posts 2367State of constant confusion! |
Such beautiful penmanship. This piece truly amazed me. Hope this helped your friend. It surely helped me. Jeffrey |
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WhiteNite Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 241Montgomery, AL |
Speachless... er however you spell it... guess I'm in the wrong message board if I can't spell huh? =) Seriously... I don't know what to say... awesome.... wish I coulc call that one my own. =) "We always said it would be good to go away, someday, but if there's nothing there to make things change, if it's the same to you I'll just hang." --Matchbox20 (Hang) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Superb? (Methinks with this one, you have come dangerously close to draining a bunch of poets of superlatives...BRAVO.) |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Kess, this one just plain gouges the eyeballs. 'Tis true - the more we love something the more we can be hurt by it. Believe me, I can feel every bit of the pain beneath this one. My empathies to you tonight, my friend. michael |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
The last verse hit me right between the eyes. Practically knocked me off my feet. Excellently worded. I'll have to keep my eye out for your work. |
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dhuron Member
since 2000-03-19
Posts 476 |
great poem. Full of power. Loved reading this. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Such a pleasure to experience your creations. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Excellent writing, as always, Kess! Glad to see you posting again! Denise |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Kess...this is absolutely beautiful. Your writing as always is esquisite Loved the final two lines by the way |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Kess, well good. . . and I hope that this provides some relief and comfort to your friend too. . . And a big HUG back to you, my friend, I've missed you too!! ---------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
'Allo m'friend. I can see that your absence has not been without it's benefits. You've come back with a mighty punch, especially for one such as I who reads much of me in this. "When Love would know no compromise" Perhaps this says most of it here. Is not a portion of "love" about compromise? When expected to be more, "Whole," as you said, then perhaps it is doomed from the beginning, no? Beautiful and haunting and right on the mark. Thank you my friend. |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
PdV: You are too kind, but thank you nonetheless. J.C: Always glad to lend a hand -- often it leads to future friendships. Thank you for reading. WhiteNite: Fear not, you are not the only poet here with the spelling affliction -- LOL. We all have our moments. Your speechlessness is the highest form of flattery; thank you. serenity: Methinks you have perfected the ideal way to stroke my already somewhat overblown ego! Thanks much! hehehe  Michael: How right you are. Unfortunately, it is difficult to love something less simply to safeguard one's peace of mind, is it not? Stubborn beast, that Love -- always thinking in extremes ... Rosemary: I am not normally a violent woman, but I will take a bow on that slug between the peepers, here. Thank you for a most generous compliment! dhuron: glad you enjoyed, thanks for reading.  Mike: Likewise, I'm sure. Denise: Glad to be back. Your enthusiasm is neverending -- people like you keep me coming back to this place! Sven: Chris: Allo yourself! (sigh) As far as my "absence" goes, I believe that it was you who said that stress and misery make for awesome poetry, was it not? LOL As for the rest, I must refer you to one of my favorite sonnets of all time: Let us not to the marriage of true minds Admit impediments. Love is not love Which alters when it alteration finds, Or bends with the remover to remove ... Indeed, my friend, any relationship is about compromise -- such is the nature of individuals, there are bound to be points on which even the most "perfect" couple will not see eye-to-eye. But Love, in and of itself , is an all-or-nothing proposition: it is either whole, or it is not love. Period. There is nothing wrong with always expecting a rose to be a rose, regardless of how sweet it might smell (or not) right at the moment! Thank you all again ... --Kess |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Better late than never means you get another step up to the plate - I love this for more than one reason... First, that it isn't about you - That's a good thing - Secondly, it's wonderfully crafted... of course... and... it's not iambic pentameter... iambic, yes... pentameter, nope... you deviant, you...  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
How lovely and yet how sad love can be... it can take you to the highest mountains.. and drag you thru the deepest valleys.... James |
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