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~Confused and Consumed~
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~Confused and Consumed~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Do you know you take my breath away, Do you see the way you make me feel. God, I want you so desperately ... I'm to the point I would beg, borrow, and steal. I didn't intend for this to happen, I didn't plan on feeling so attracted to you. This fantasy has become my reality ... and I'm lost in knowing what to do. I didn't know this was gonna be so hard, Why do you have to be so far away. There are so many obstacles to overcome, Fate has dealt a hard hand to play. I'm always trying to remind myself ... there is so much we still have yet to see. And I have to be honest and realize, if you knew the truth, you'd let me be. I wonder if you knew my depth ... if the intensity would scare you away. I wonder if you knew my need, if you would even want to stay. I feel so many things tonight ... I don't even know who I am. There are so many things that hold me here, but right now I simply don't give a damn. So I sit here alone, confused and consumed ... wondering if I'm on your mind like this ... or even if at all. And I'm holding my breath and praying ... while looking for a soft place to fall. Janet Marie 4/7/00 2:15 am * thanks to DH, for the borrow of the poetic line(smile) The stars shine so bright, now's the time I close my eyes - soft wind touch my face, Cool sand upon the place where I once kissed you And held you close. Now I will reach for the stars... Because Oh my love, that's where you are... Though the storms of black night rage on I still see your face I still feel your lips on mine And though my heart feels all alone without you I still hear you sing to me I still hear your voice on the sea... vertical horizon |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Oh, Janet, this is sooooo beautiful! Breathtaking! Denise |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
What a beautiful heartfelt passionate poem!! |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
JM, there is no greater compliment than for a poet to use your lines. Take all you want. Take me to, no begging necessary, but we must steal the night and borrow the moon. Really liked the poem. Pretty intense stuff. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Janet, Loved your poem and don't worry there are plenty of arms to catch you if you fall.m *L* |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing Janet...lots of feelings and emotions coming to life. James |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JanetMarie~ This is beautifully done. Sounds like you need to just let it happen. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
-Janet this my friend I LIKE. You may be confused but you do it so beautifully and with such grace. this was sensational and as always made me smile. this person who you are writing about surely feels the same way about you. i just got this feeling deep down in my heart. go with the emotions...it's a bumpy ride but in the end you just might be glad you did. take care & love ya, AMY  ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
wow janet......too much |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Absolutely stunning work, Janet...you have me breathless and in disbelief..you took the words right out of my head it seems and laid them in a truly beautiful poem. Wow..wonderful. *Krista Knutson* As soon as man does not take his existence for granted, but beholds it as something unfathomably mysterious, thought begins. ~*Albert Schweitzer*~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Thanks guys...you really humble me with your generous and very kind encouragement. I truly appreciate you reading and replying to my work...THANK YOU!!! Denise Martie SBJ Margie Amy Thank you for such sweet and heartfelt,sincere replies. you are all so supportive of my work and I appreciate you more than you could know. Danny...thanks for ALL the offers..LOL...be careful what you wish for  thanks for the line, and the smiles. Sy...you are so sweet...thank you my poetic friend...nice to know someone will catch us if we fall.thanks for reading. Robert B...thanks for the WOW...and the laugh... I have been told that MANY TIMES(too much) LOL Alwye...THANK YOU...Im so very complimented that I could take your poetic breath way...as you always do mine...and its always nice to have someone relate to our words and emotions.thanks for the very sweet reply. take care, all, love ya, jm The stars shine so bright, now's the time I close my eyes - soft wind touch my face, Cool sand upon the place where I once kissed you And held you close. Now I will reach for the stars... Because Oh my love, that's where you are... Though the storms of black night rage on I still see your face I still feel your lips on mine And though my heart feels all alone without you I still hear you sing to me I still hear your voice on the sea... vertical horizon |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Yes Janet, very beautiful indeed ... Your talent is shining in this piece ... 'S' "Shoot for the moon.Even if you miss,you'll land among the stars." _Les Brown_ |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Janet Marie~ This was so absolutely beautiful, my favourite tonight. Tracie~ Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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