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Janet Marie
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0 posted 2000-04-04 10:56 AM


~What a Heart Cant See~

Love no longer sees me, here where in I stand,
hearts that once felt promise, now feel chained by this gold band.
Eyes that fail to recognize ... the changes this hearts been thru ...
she's not the same scared woman, that he once knew.

Two hearts becoming lost in the distance ...
the space in between grows wide,
in time so much had faded away ... falling into this great divide.
How does this happen, is neglect the only one to blame,
this heart still remembers when they shared so much more than a name.

So many questions go unanswered ...
or maybe there's just nothing left to say,
when silence is the only one speaking, hearts can hear no reasons to stay.
When did his eyes lose their vision ... her reflection is no where to be found,
so her eyes then realize ..."the ties that bind"... now only tie her down.

At what cost, what price ... is contentment held,
do we have to dance with the devil--to have all our demons expelled.
When does following your heart, become an act of sin,
only a heart's conscience can know, the answers all lie with in.

Who knows this wisdom, who possesses the secrets untold,
is it fate or destiny that decides, which hearts will end with ...
"to have and to hold."
All this heart knows ... is love no longer sees me, here where in I stand...
and now I hear whispered promises calling out to me...
reaching for my hand.

janet marie  




 ...when you walked into the room, I saw their faces,
you made it feel like time was standing still...and I felt fascination...
then you turned and smiled in my direction...
and my heart...gave me away.
glass tiger

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TerryW
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Louisville, Mississippi, USA
1 posted 2000-04-04 11:08 AM


Janet,
     Extremely powerful and emotional piece.  I know exactly what you mean.  I went through the same thing not too long ago, and I was on the receiving end.  I know what it is like to look in the eyes of the one you love and see no trace in them of what you have inside of you.    You really captured the mood in this one, girl!
    

 ~you reached inside, you touched my heart,
and I am all the better for it~
Terry A. Woodson, Jr.

Cerenity
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2 posted 2000-04-04 11:09 AM


Hi Janet Marie,

You just said word for word what I am feeling right now, it almost scares me to see it in writing and I feel if I do not do something I am going to fall in to the great devide and not find my way out again.
Thank you so much for this poem.

Cerenity

hoot_owl_rn
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3 posted 2000-04-04 11:44 AM


I can very much relate to the words in this one  
Aimster
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Charlotte, NC
4 posted 2000-04-04 12:03 PM


janet-

you took all my words and my breath away with this one! i could feel the intense emotions behind every single word. i could feel the unanswered questions, the pain, the fustration as if it was happening to me. i am sorry that this person caused you pain. but i have learned that it is our darkest moments and hardest times that sometimes turn out to be our biggest victories, a silver lining just inside out. hang in there. i KNOW you are a strong person, and i still as always stand in respect of you!

Love ya,
AMY

S M I L E  

 ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~

PoeticKnight
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since 2000-01-20
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5 posted 2000-04-04 12:05 PM


Heart breaking poem. So real I can almost picture the emotions. I hope everything brightens up in your life. *S*
Hey, i replied, whoa....LOL

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
6 posted 2000-04-04 12:09 PM


Janet,
A wonderful piece of writing. Good thoughts, good words, good poem. Sy

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

7 posted 2000-04-04 06:52 PM


Terry, thank you for your replies..you are always SO generous with your kind words.

Cerenity, im sorry you relate to this so well,your words touched me.

hoot-girl...I knew that you would.

Amy...you make me blush and smile.
your too much sunshine.

Jer, things seem poeticly better every day  
and yes, I felt the earth move...its a big deal when you grace me with a reply. *L*

Sy, thank you for the read and kind words.
thanks guys
jm

 ...when you walked into the room, I saw their faces,
you made it feel like time was standing still...and I felt fascination...
then you turned and smiled in my direction...
and my heart...gave me away.
glass tiger

Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15
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Tulsa, OK
8 posted 2000-04-04 07:03 PM


JM, another fine work from your talented pen.
Feeling jumps out from every word.
Stay strong and delight us with more of your poetry.
DH

[This message has been edited by Danny Holloway (edited 04-04-2000).]

Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08
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Pennsylvania
9 posted 2000-04-04 07:56 PM


Your writing always speaks from the heart, and that is what makes it so powerful. This is a very emotional piece.
Excellent!
Liz

Marina
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Pickering, Ontario
10 posted 2000-04-04 08:09 PM


Love this one JM.  You have captivayed the feeling perfectly.

Marina

Butterflies_dont_cry
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Michigan
11 posted 2000-04-04 09:51 PM



Janet....Oh you know how to capture it so well, I used to wonder when I made the switch from "me" to "the wife" now I don't bother asking.  You are such an exquisite writer...thank you for sharing this you've touched my heart with this as you often do.


 Hold me for yesterday
Kiss me for tomorrow
But love me for today.


Mike
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12 posted 2000-04-04 10:08 PM


Glad I read.  Well written and expressive.  Nicely done.
Balladeer
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13 posted 2000-04-05 12:04 PM


"the ties that bind now only tie her down"..This is excellent writing, Janet.
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14 posted 2000-04-05 12:28 PM


More like an entry in a diary than a poem because such honesty is seldom voiced so others can hear it.  Wonderful work.

 



David2
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15 posted 2000-04-05 09:26 AM


Janet Marie,
    This is quite a sad piece, but it also shows a great understanding. I pray if this is a personal plea that you find the solutions you seek. They can be found, no one deserves to live in a quagmire of lost emotions. Good luck.
                      David2

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