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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania 
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My own personal prison; bars to hold in the pain Tears fall from my eyes like death's black rain They just never seem to come to an end Clinging onto the world without a single friend And yet I am here by my own power Never giving myself a chance to flower To me; dependency is so very frightening Yet it is always there and threatening And so I cry for you; and I cry for me I cry for all the hurt that you can not see You must not know all the pain I feel Or know that these smiles, just aren't real The thought of someone stealing my soul And once again leaving that empty hole Is an ever present reminder of the past Every good thing just doesn't seem to last I may never be the person that I am inside That is the reason why I must hide Build up a wall so that no one comes near For behind that wall grows a garden of pain and fear Before the time comes when it is you that I love I know that I must first be free of All the hurt and pain from deep within I must learn to love myself for my life to begin... ~Susie~ |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Very painful. Best of luck to you, Susie. Hope that soon you can break through the prison bars to find love. Elizabeth "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!" -The Crucible |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~susie, this was very well written and the words held some powerful messages. this was something that i once could relate to. keep your head up and keep fighting, and you will get past those bars that hold you back from truly enojoying the wonder and beauty of life. take care and god bless. i wish you lots of luck in your future. again, great poem! Amy  ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Angel, I totally understand this brick wall thing, I have even learned how to put in a elevator of sorts, because I think every thing is OK and then bam, but in my garden of pain I planted black rose all over because to me there beauty goes both ways, I hope you are set free soon. Thank you, Cerenity |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Your last line says it all...we must learn to love ourselves before we are truly capable of loving another. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Hi, Suse~ Nice emotionally-packed poetry, my friend. Loving yourself is the place to begin. Good to see you writing. Keep it up, gal. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Sometimes the personal prison of our own creation is harder to escape. But you will do it! I'm sure...  |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
Elizabeth: Thanks so much, I'm on my way Amy: Thanks, I will. I'm so glad you got through it Cerenity: Thanks so much sweetheart. Geesh, I know how that feels. Thanks again Hoot: Thanks for reading. That last line does say it all... Marge: Hey, I know, I've been on a sort of vacation (a nice way to say a really bad case of writer's block  ) But then again, with all the great poetry here, I was real busy reading. Thanks Poet deVine: Thanks for reading and having faith ~Susie~ |
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TravisK New Member
since 2000-04-01
Posts 8England |
Another poem that I can relate to.Nice work. Take Care, Travis Kennedy. |
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CherylLynnMckee Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 215 |
So well written...I felt the same way for many years...it took a long time for me to realize my worth...and with that came freedom..you will find it to. |
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Rod17NYS Junior Member
since 2000-03-24
Posts 15 |
Hey this poem is very well written...I think all of us is a prisioner of our own past and faults, but there's someone out there with a key to set you free, and when you least expect..You'll think everything was just a bad dream...Good luck =o) Rod |
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Angel Senior Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 551Pennsylvania |
TravisK-Thanks so much. I love hearing people say they can relate to what I write .CherylLynnMckee-I'm so happy you got through it. I think I'm on my way too. Thanks so much .Rod-Welcome to Passions. I am getting through this slowly. Thanks again .~Susie~ |
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