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CherylLynnMckee Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 215 |
The cold winds blow in silent fields.. Where death hangs low over fallen souls.. Where will the stooped men dig.. all the needed holes.. Well worn shovels.. Bloodied hands.. Aching backs.. The ground claims them all lovingly back.. Quietly covering in time.. all the muddy tracks.. The barest facts left to be discovered.. That war and death.. had ever came to rest.. Inside these peacful fields.. |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
The ground claims them all lovingly back.. Quietly covering in time.. all the muddy tracks.. Cool lines. I like this poem. I am a sucker for dark stuff, done a little differently, and with style. |
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CherylLynnMckee Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 215 |
Thanks JML my first dark post here..didn't know how it was going to go over..your kind words are much appreciated. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Sheesh.. I didn't think it was dark... kind of enjoyed it... well done... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cheryl, Enjoyed the post, you write well. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Excellent post Cheryl...the ending sums it up nicely  |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Very Well Done, Cheryl! It wasn't really dark, but more starkly truthful!  ~you reached inside, you touched my heart, and I am all the better for it~ Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
This barely touches the edge of dark well done Cheryl see you in the twilight zone Rex}>{{{{o> I'm not ugly! I'm just visually challenged! |
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CherylLynnMckee Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 215 |
Thanks everyone...this one is diferent than I usually write...debated on posting it or not..So your words are very reassuring to me..Thanks again. Plus can anyone tell me why when I get an e-mail saying a certain person replyed on my poem but then when I look it didn't show up? |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
For the same reason that when there is someone standing behind you and you turn and look to find there is no one there ... twilight zone ... your being watched Rex}>{{{{o> |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Intense poem, Cheryl. I like it! Rex - you crack me up!  Cheryl, it is probably just your browser....just click your refresh button then you should be able to see all the recent posts! |
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CherylLynnMckee Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 215 |
Can someone tell me why the last 3 posts from people on this poem doesnt show up on here? This is the third time I have tried to post on my own poem..they were not showing up either. |
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CherylLynnMckee Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 215 |
LOL at Rex....I was starting to wonder if I was being erased..lol..Thanks to you all for helping me out I am not a real bright when it comes to problems with my unit....thats what my sons for. And he's at school..lol. |
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Collins Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 57 |
I've been trying to send you an letter but it doesn't seem to want to get throught!!! My e mail is [email protected] I'm sorry about the dodgy name!!! Anyway i hope that there will i want everyone to get on!!!! (Please i only want you to answer my e mail!!! Once you know it, please destroy it!!! 'cos i don't like to give away of my feelings on the matter. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This poem was so visual and full of stark reality...and very well done. |
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