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Kayes poem - The Swan. |
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Collins Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 57 |
Her Love was like the blackest swan, swimming 'neath the midnight sun. Gentley gliding through the lake, I watch her movements, the ripples she makes. The circles extend until no more, or get washed upon the pebbled shore. Still she moves on without a pause, Does this bird know the damage it's caused. |
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CherylLynnMckee Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 215 |
I enjoyed it...lovely poem! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
Welcome to Passions!! I enjoyed the story you told. The ripple effect often goes un-noticed by those that cause the most waves. Can't wait to read more!! |
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Collins Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 57 |
Thank you so much for your replies. It is such a personal poem, it means alot to know that someone likes it. Thank you. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Collins, Welcome to passions!! I loved your poem. Beautiful image of the black swan. I am betting it has no idea of the damage and never will. Looking forward to more of your work. ----------------------------------------------------------------- Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Collins~ What a lovely entrance to the family of Passion's poets. Welcome. This is truly a beautiful poem. The thought of the ripples being sent to the shore of our hearts is truly a unique look at what love can sometimes do when it goes swimming by. Hope to see more from you. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Collins Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 57 |
Thank you Marge and Lone wolf. If anyone else is reding this i strongly suggest you check out some of the work these two have done (indeed butterflys don't cry and chreylLynnmcKee) There is some really good stuff there. Thanks for you replies!!! |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
I enjoyed this, Collins, and agree with you about the quality of this one. The only line I stumbled over a little bit, as far as meter is concerned, was the last one. Otherwise, well done poem. Jim |
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Collins Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 57 |
Cheers jim!! (I think you're right about the last line, i'll work on it!!) |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This is a beautiful poem...Welcome to passions  |
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Collins Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 57 |
thanks for your kind replies!!!! Peace. |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
Lovely, Collins! Welcome to Passions! TTerry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Collins Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 57 |
Cheers Terry!! o |
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Collins Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 57 |
thankyou, |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Collins, This is beautiful, I really like the last sentence, giving a twist to the beauty. Welcome to passions, Cerenity |
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Collins Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 57 |
thankyou for your comments. peace. |
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Collins Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 57 |
Good nite everyone. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Welcome to Passions, Collins! This is a beautiful poem! Please check your email for a special welcome! Denise |
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