Open Poetry #6 |
Little river of my thoughts |
fool Member
since 2000-02-07
Posts 61 |
I looked into your eyes and they were empty places for me. It filled my heart with sad waters, and the little river of my thoughts swelled and swelled till the river became a torrent raging through my crippled skull bursting past my defences unstoppable uncontrollable all consuming this river drowned my gasping hopes my dreams clawed at its banks but were sucked under swept away and lost My love, stood in the path of this deluge naked and honest defenceless The sea of thoughts bore down upon my love eager to consume it All my visions of us love,love making,tender whispers in the night, my raging thoughts swept over them battered them,smashed against them mindless killing waves of fear of confusion of hot anger again and again at last to recede at last to concede for as my thoughts swept past an island in my mind still stood the last essence of myself my love for you. |
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Rosalind Palafox
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That is how i feel most of the time... great poem and metaphors. "Love comes but never goes, for if it ever went, it was never love to begin with." |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Great poem fool. What Rosalind said I am not a poet, I am merely one who speaks in emotion |
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