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The Ice Queen Dances
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The Ice Queen Dances |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA 
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The Ice Queen Dances < !signature-->The ice queen dances tonight, alone, while men watch on to see her perform her show. Eyes of blue look right through them as she struts her stuff for all to see. Twirling, she moves, a picture of beauty and grace. The world becomes her stage, but her star burned out long ago. The ice queen dances tonight, the coldness in her heart put there by those who now wish only to possess her. Her glass slippers fail to carry the weight she has come to bare and they shatter like the illusions she once had. Frozen smile upon her face, she twists the truth to fit her expectations, lying only to herself. The ice queen dances tonight, alone, as you watch on. She performs for you. Cold, she has become. Watch how she moves ...just don’t touch or you'll get burned. There are only two ages of people...living and dead and you all look about the right age to me  [This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 03-24-2000).] |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
ouch yuh its relief to know you women folk can call each other such names makes muh pms poem not scare me so much yuh...ouch gettin burned by this lady ouch ouch gf'lkfhg' |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wow! Superb! I get a really clear visual of this woman..and get a chill thinking about it! Very good!  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Hoot, Yes ice can burn, but its wonderful when you warm it. Excellent poem. *L* |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very powerful poem, Ruth. Very strong. Well written! Denise |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Oh my, Hoot~ I just grabbed a sweater ... felt like the temperature dropped a degree or two. Wonderful image jumps to mind ... you are HOT ! er .. COLD er ... definitely not TEPID ! This is just wonderful. This is visually powerful. LOL at Walt ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Walt, PDV, Seymore, Marge and Denise...thank you all so much for reading |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
This was an excellent piece. I have known some women how danced professionally. You described their emotions to a tee. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
This is wonderful Ruth!! What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Tess Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 288Australia |
this poem doesnt make me feel cold..it makes me feel the sad disillusionment of a women trapped into doing something....something that obviously she doesnt really enjoy..but for whatever reasons she feels she has to do she twists the truth to fit her expectations, lying only to herself. something that l guess she tries to justify to herself...and probably deep down realizes the lies..and her ice cold outer is her way of dealing with it..of maintaining herself "What is a friend? A single soul dwelling in two bodies." -Aristotle |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Wonderful, Ruth. It is difficult for me to respond...having some experience with ICE. I think I could cope better if ICE were cold (or hot). No, I have seen an ICE queen, and her eyes speak the droning monotone of indiference. Yes, you poem evoked a VERY strong emotional response in me......well done! INclan |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Hoot, I had to read this one just cause of the title alone...this is my nickname...that and frigidare woman  have you been peeking again..lol excellent poem , perfect visuals... may I have this dance...*S* take care, jm Do you live by the book, do you play by the rules Do you care what is thought by others about you If this day is all that is promised to you Do you live for the present, the future the past... tracy chapman |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ruth, this is an exceptional poem! Wonderful lines all, super ending, well-lit story...bravo! |
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Panthers Chrysalis Member
since 2000-03-25
Posts 51 |
I just had to read your poem when I came across the title! .... Whenever my friend and I go out dancing- she refers to me as the "Ice Princess".... I was not disappointed by your spectacular poem- and felt as though I was on the dance floor once again! I can't wait to read more of your work! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I just want to say thanks to everyone for reading and replying. Although it can be seen as an exotic dancer it is really about a woman scorned time and time again to the point where she has given up on love. The coldness that men shun was put there by the very same. She lies to herself when she thinks she needs no one. She dances (lives life) with no zest. |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
This brings the picture to your mind as you're reading and you have captured it well Hoot. Great poem Keep all the windows of your mind open Anne Rooks |
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Jamie Dawg Junior Member
since 2000-03-25
Posts 35 |
sooo fine...I can really relate, and the rhythm was smooth and sinuous. Similar to Stevie Smith's not waving but drowning. Where do you get your inspiration? Peace. From a brother to a sister. |
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Windrider Silverbreeze Junior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 33 |
(In responce to Ice Queen Dancer) They call me unfeeling, They call me 'cold fish'. They say 'she is heartless, And call me a b****. They say I feel nothing, I'm dead to the world. If I'm so dead I wonder, Why does it hurt. (I know the Ice Queen facade only too well.. very well written) |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Wonderfully metaphorical, Ruth. You're such a creative writer. ~ Claire |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Whew! Almost missed this one. It is superb writing, Ruth. I knew immediately it wasn't about dancing, of course. It is a very powerful poem. So why didn't you tell me you know my ex-wife?  |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Ruth this was powerful! I love it! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is quite an effective extended metaphor here... Of course, you know that I know - that the Ice Queen has a very warm inner heart..  [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 03-26-2000).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thank you everyone for your comments on this one. Nan...I just want to say that means a lot to me Wildrider....great reply , thank you. I do know exactly where you are coming from on that  |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
Wow... this is a great poem, and so true, for preformers onstage and in life. Keep up the good work! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
I've met a few people like this before ... and at first it is difficult to continue to try to be friendly ... but perseverance pays off because they have turned out to be amoung my very best of friends beautifully written Rex}>{{{{o> |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Love Bug and Rex...thank you both |
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