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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
Timeless In you did time create a masterpiece, Of beauty ever rare and unsurpassed. With diligence his work doth never cease, Each gentle stroke improving on the past. With special care he molds you with his hands, That fleeting days and hours must not be grieved . Your softest sweetest soul alone then stands, The breath of love and beauty so achieved. To watch you grow and gain at times brings tears, To know that in our lives we’ve found a place, Where eagerly we wait the passing years, Content and calm in every warm embrace. Engage your day with great alacrity, For time has found his greatest work in thee. |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Well said!!! |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
"Of beauty ever rare and unsurpassed" nice expression. Interesting look at time and passing years. Well done. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This sonnet is a masterpiece!! Oh, so beautiful!! Denise |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Shall I tell you you are very talented? Check out publication tips here in the forums for some information to different publishers...you need to get these out there if they aren't already  |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Dave...I am overwhelmed by your poetry! so much passion I find within your words! I look forward to the next post!  Ps.Ditto the above! "Love is not love Which alters when it alteration finds, Or bends with the remover to remove. O,no! it is an ever-fixed mark....William Shakespeare |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
An excellent sonnet, David. I can see why it is a favorite style of yours. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
We've another Passions sonneteer... I'm smilin'  [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 03-23-2000).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I can't smile like Nan...but I do love a sonnet...and you write them so sweet. |
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David2 Member
since 2000-03-22
Posts 407 |
Nan, It's true, I love sonnets, over 95% of my work is in sonnet form. It is wonderful to know there are others who use it as well. David2 |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
I rather enjoy an occasional sonnet myself. Excellent effort. Enjoyed muchly. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
David2~ Well, not to be out-donnet ... I really like your sonnet ! I don't care what they call it, for it fairly flaunts with glee. It sings a song of reminisce that hums my melody. You're a welcomed addition to this poet's chamber. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
very beautiful words here...it was a sweet read...very nice, take care, jm and you can say baby... baby can I hold you tonight maybe if told you the right words... at the right time, you'd be mine... baby can I hold you tonight... tracy chapman |
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TerryW Senior Member
since 2000-03-23
Posts 779Louisville, Mississippi, USA |
David, Your words dance across my mind carrying with them a truth unrivaled -- the images fill my soul and wash over me with a warmth that cannot be explained...... Very, very, verrrrry good! Terry A. Woodson, Jr. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
David2, I've read this aloud twice, and am very taken by the ease and flow of its sound. A beautiful and tender message coupled with your gentle alliteration make this a very lovely poem. I think I may have to try my hand at "sonnet~ing"...wonder if anyone might be willing to give a bit of instruction...? Wonderful writing. ~ Claire |
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