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devina
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0 posted 2000-03-22 12:57 PM


Warm my soul with sweet delight-
Fill my heart with love and light-
*As I wish upon this star tonight*

Answer my prayers of happiness-
Feel the love that’s cast upon us-
Clear your mind of all but *trust*

Grant me your gently shaken hand-
Follow me sweetly in God’s plan-
Once fallen, now we both stand…

Care not of what they might think-
Feel the flow of undefined strength-
You’ll have your fill, take a drink…

With loving arms enveloping your soul-
I’ll fill your voids, I’ll make you whole-
Within the future that we now hold…




 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...


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Janet Marie
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1 posted 2000-03-22 01:12 AM


*SIGH*

this is SO beautiful devina...so tender and loving and full of hope...such devotion...
LUCKY LUCKY GUY...
take care, jm

 and you can say baby...
baby can I hold you tonight
maybe if told you the right words...
at the right time,
you'd be mine...
baby can I hold you tonight...
tracy chapman



Michael
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3 posted 2000-03-22 01:19 AM


devina, Your warmth and healing heart flows beautifully in this.  When it come down to it, with out trust, there is nothing anyway.  The future looks bright, indeed.


michael

serenity blaze
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4 posted 2000-03-22 01:22 AM


This is lovely 'sis'...sweet and direct, like you!  hope you gotchya e mail...
Love to you.

Daniella
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since 2000-03-21
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5 posted 2000-03-22 02:47 AM


Devina,
Very lovely poetry..My favorite part was
"Follow me sweetly in Gods plan" Daniella

JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
6 posted 2000-03-22 04:50 AM


Lovely devina...I like the title...a great choice...and I like the first two lines..."warm my soul with sweet delight..fill my heart with love and light" you really started the poem off nice and rich.   James
Marge Tindal
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7 posted 2000-03-22 07:40 AM


Devina~
The trail that is marked with
bread crumbs of trust is an easy
trail to follow.

'Answer my prayers of happiness-
Feel the love that’s cast upon us-
Clear your mind of all but *trust*'

The karma is alive !
~*Marge*~




 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com


Enola
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8 posted 2000-03-22 08:18 AM


Whoever this is for is very lucky.  And so are you, to have such a talent.  This is fantastic.

 The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition.

Enola
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9 posted 2000-03-22 08:21 AM


Whoever this is for is very lucky, and so are you.  This is fantastic.

 The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition.

Dark Angel
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10 posted 2000-03-22 08:22 AM


Beautiful writing devina, love it.  

 What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge



hoot_owl_rn
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11 posted 2000-03-22 10:34 AM


Simply devine  
Denise
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12 posted 2000-03-22 10:56 AM


This is beautiful, Devina!  

Denise

poetFemmeFatale
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13 posted 2000-03-22 11:42 AM


Your poetry is so warm and beautiful...Heck, I think I'm falling in love with you girl!  Reading your mushy stuff, gives me the warm fuzzies too!  LOL  You have certainly come a long way in your writing and expressing yourself.  This is very beautiful and sincere....Bravissimo!


Sven
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14 posted 2000-03-22 11:04 PM


Devina. . .I am always amazed by the depth of emotion in your writing. . . this is no exception. . . simply beautiful. . .

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 That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Marina
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Pickering, Ontario
15 posted 2000-03-23 12:04 PM


devina I'm glad to see your poetry become more uplifting again! You stay strong girl, plenty of fish in the sea! ( Although I think I'd keep this one.)

Marina

devina
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Cali
16 posted 2000-03-23 12:20 PM


JM-Lucky guy??? lucky me I'd say...

Michael-glad you know I'm here for you...I would do anything for you, ya know?

serenity- hugs and love back atcha sis!!!

Daniella- thank you and welcome to passions!!!

James- glad to hear it...and thank you!!

Marge- as you say...karma is good, no? love you hun!!

Enola- thank you for the compliment...tis only my heart speaking...

DA, Ruth, & Denise- your words of praise are just as lovely...thank you...

Femme- don't fall too hard, I'm already taken...

Sven- you always read me so well...thank you m'friend...

Marina- I don't think I could let him go...nor would I want to...thanks hun...

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 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



[This message has been edited by devina (edited 03-23-2000).]

David2
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since 2000-03-22
Posts 407

17 posted 2000-03-23 01:31 AM


Devina,
   Your poem is very touching, I look forward to reading more of your work.
        David2

neitham
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since 1999-12-29
Posts 42
India
18 posted 2000-03-23 03:03 AM


"With loving arms enveloping your soul-
I’ll fill your voids, I’ll make you whole-
Within the future that we now hold…"

devina...i do wish someone whispers this words in my ear...M is indeed fortunate to have found you. Love it very much.
Best regards,
neitham




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