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Within The Eye Of Storm
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Within The Eye Of Storm |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Just a groovin' little line of bass, rushing wind through eaves and cracks... God's blowin' on the harp tonight (watch this train roll down the tracks...) Raphael picks out the lead, bending branches in the trees. Cymbals too, are keeping time on rusty old forgotten chime-- only sound I ever heard them make. It's pretty, when transformers blow-- sparks of blue and then green flare. A ritual of lighting lamps to meet the eyes of silent stare. Windows breathe at times like these-- glass bends in frames made loose. Sheets of rain--slanted--pounding-- cease suddenly, as if on cue. It comes in waves, labor pains, each contraction less forgiving... and always echo of the thought-- "what about The River?" In Mother Nature's blender, now, at Elements command-- when comes that THING (surprising me) that only Silence understands... --Unbolt the door so we'll feel more, (balmy-sweet tranquility...) for there within the eye of storm dances serenity. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and she dances DIVINELY!!!!!!! this is awesome serenity...excellent rhyme and flow...the pace is perfect... very nice work...take your bow...I'll put another quarter in the juke box and we can watch you dance again...  take care, jm and you can say baby... baby can I hold you tonight maybe if told you the right words... at the right time, you'd be mine... baby can I hold you tonight... tracy chapman |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Why thank you, Janet Marie! Tho I fear it's much to read... |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Never too much sis...this is just right...and DAMN good!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Sweet Serenity~ This is absolutely the best ! The storm moved lyrically through the entire piece. Held me spell-bound to the end and then back to read again. It was almost as though I could envision you singing and dancing through the storm. Image jumps off the page. Never too much ... it ran until the storm played out. Just wonderful, gal. Love ya' ~*Marge*~< !signature--> ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com [This message has been edited by Marge Tindal (edited 03-22-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wonderful poem, Serenity! Very well done! Denise |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I have to agree with Janet Marie on this one, your dance is breathtaking  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Janet Marie--Divine words from a dvine poet! I appreciate your understanding. devina--glad you enjoyed-love & peace to you. Marge--I feel like I've just been patted on the head. This comes from a tradition of "riding out the hurricane," here in Bayou country. (says a little some- thing about me- doncha think?) But more about that later! Right now I'm sending smiles and hugs across the miles to you! dsnyder-so glad I made ya look! Always my pleasure to hear from you! 'hoot'--thank you. Your warmth& kindness have not gone unnoticed. Thanks. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This is absolutely wonderful! Loved the last stanza...super! |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Serenity....breathtaking. I love the images. Great flow throughout....not too long at all!! Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
--Unbolt the door so we'll feel more, (balmy-sweet tranquility...) for there within the eye of storm dances serenity. Beautiful Serenity, Beautiful! What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Broken Wings Member
since 2000-03-18
Posts 157Miami, FL. |
This poem took me back to hurricane Andrew (miami)...i felt the tension in my chest...and I felt great relief as you took me to the that wonderful moment....the eye of the storm. EXCELLENT! take care, Broken Wings "As you learn and grow, you will realize the greater the pain, the greater the growth." -IYANLA VANZANT |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
I always love a good storm Fascination holds me in its' grip Sat out once on my front porch til trees across the street were uprooted ... then headed for the basement ... only tornado I've ever seen ... wouldn't have experienced it if I ran and hid Rex}<{{{{o> |
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