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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2000-03-22 12:29 PM

Just a groovin' little line of bass,
rushing wind through eaves and cracks...
God's blowin' on the harp tonight
(watch this train roll down the tracks...)

Raphael picks out the lead,
bending branches in the trees.
Cymbals too, are keeping time
on rusty old forgotten chime--
only sound I ever heard them make.

It's pretty, when transformers blow--
sparks of blue and then green flare.
A ritual of lighting lamps
to meet the eyes of silent stare.

Windows breathe at times like these--
glass bends in frames made loose.
Sheets of rain--slanted--pounding--
cease suddenly, as if on cue.

It comes in waves, labor pains,
each contraction less forgiving...
and always echo of the thought--
"what about The River?"

In Mother Nature's blender, now,
at Elements command--
when comes that THING
(surprising me)
that only Silence understands...

   --Unbolt the door
       so we'll feel more,
(balmy-sweet tranquility...)
     for there within the eye of storm
     dances serenity.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-03-22 01:08 AM

and she dances DIVINELY!!!!!!!
this is awesome serenity...excellent rhyme and flow...the pace is perfect...
very nice work...take your bow...I'll put another quarter in the juke box and we can watch you dance again...

take care, jm

and you can say baby...
baby can I hold you tonight
maybe if told you the right words...
at the right time,
you'd be mine...
baby can I hold you tonight...
tracy chapman

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

2 posted 2000-03-22 02:38 AM

Why thank you, Janet Marie! Tho I fear it's much to read...

devina
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since 1999-10-28

Posts 3539
Cali

3 posted 2000-03-22 02:59 AM

Never too much sis...this is just right...and DAMN good!!!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

4 posted 2000-03-22 06:42 AM

Sweet Serenity~

This is absolutely the best !
The storm moved lyrically through
the entire piece.
Held me spell-bound to the end and
then back to read again.
It was almost as though I could
envision you singing and dancing
through the storm.

Image jumps off the page.
Never too much ...
it ran until the storm played out.
Just wonderful, gal.
Love ya'
~*Marge*~< !signature-->

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

[This message has been edited by Marge Tindal (edited 03-22-2000).]

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

5 posted 2000-03-22 10:33 AM

Wonderful poem, Serenity! Very well done!

Denise

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

6 posted 2000-03-22 11:01 AM

I have to agree with Janet Marie on this one, your dance is breathtaking

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

7 posted 2000-03-22 12:57 PM

Janet Marie--Divine words from a dvine poet!
            I appreciate your understanding.

devina--glad you enjoyed-love & peace to you.

Marge--I feel like I've just been patted on
       the head.  This comes from a tradition
       of "riding out the hurricane," here in
       Bayou country.  (says a little some-
       thing about me- doncha think?)  But
       more about that later!   Right now I'm
       sending smiles and hugs across the
       miles to you!

dsnyder-so glad I made ya look!  Always my
       pleasure to hear from you!

'hoot'--thank you.  Your warmth& kindness
       have not gone unnoticed.   Thanks.

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

8 posted 2000-03-22 03:13 PM

This is absolutely wonderful! Loved the last stanza...super!

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

9 posted 2000-03-22 03:21 PM

Serenity....breathtaking. I love the images. Great flow throughout....not too long at all!!

Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end.
--Michael W. Smith

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

10 posted 2000-03-22 04:44 PM

--Unbolt the door
     so we'll feel more,
(balmy-sweet tranquility...)
    for there within the eye of storm
    dances serenity.

Beautiful Serenity, Beautiful!

What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge

Broken Wings
Member

since 2000-03-18

Posts 157
Miami, FL.

11 posted 2000-03-22 06:17 PM

This poem took me back to hurricane Andrew (miami)...i felt the tension in my chest...and I felt great relief as you took me to the that wonderful moment....the eye of the storm. EXCELLENT!

take care,
Broken Wings

"As you learn and grow, you will realize the greater the pain, the greater the growth."
-IYANLA VANZANT

Rex Allen McCoy
Member Elite

since 2000-01-30

Posts 2863
Sippin a Timmy's in London

12 posted 2000-03-23 12:30 PM

I always love a good storm
Fascination holds me in its' grip
Sat out once on my front porch til trees across the street were uprooted ... then headed for the basement ... only tornado I've ever seen ... wouldn't have experienced it if I ran and hid

Rex}<{{{{o>

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