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Rake it up
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Rake it up |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Look at this vibrant sky! It has lost its shroud that hung gray and cloaked across back yards. It flung it off for spring, to see how a sky can beam after the wind has brushed it and torn all wayward leaves that would be fluttering. I can feel the ions shift and quicken the pulse of time, for the minute is crisp and going is not laced but silky with movement. The flowers are listening for the honey bees return their ears cocked their sweetness opening, fragrant and beguiling. Look at this vibrant sky! I see the fragile canopy that held my youth tattered and failed across the ripening grasses, and I think this day is for a lover’s touch, singing nonsense songs, and screeching children gleefully negligent of their preciousness. It is also a day for shedding, and that’s what I do. Like the snake, this skin has grown too old for the slither of my soul, this ripe blossoming is wondrous in its new and ribald glistening, it splits the old and leaves it like an errant leaf, and today I will rake it up. [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 03-21-2000).] |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Martie, such an uplifting and spirit~filled poem...beauty in truth. Loved it. ~ Claire |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ Only you ! 'this skin has grown to old for the slither of my soul' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is a wonderful portrayal of Spring/rebirth! Done only as you can do it! Denise |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Claire--what a beautiful reply Marge--you make me feel so special Denise--spring and re birth is wonderful, isn't it |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Can't do anything but just smile here with this one  Rake it all in girl !! |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ruth, I am getting tired of all this raking....need some help! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Martie, What a beautiful spirit you have, and all your poetry is "silky with movement". I love it. Liz |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I'm ready for spring! Oh, wait..it's been here since November! Arizona is strange..while you all are digging out, we're tanning....  |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Martie, you're the queen, lady, the queen! You rule! You Rock! Corinne |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
and how did I miss this gem... *smile* I could rake up your marvelous poetry all day my friend... |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz--and I love the you in you. PdV--We don't exactly dig out in southern Calif. either--I do love Arizona. Wow! Corinne, what a wonderful reply--you rock yourself, girl! Mike--Thanks for bringing this back up. I needed a reminder of how sweet life is--and you. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ I like it even better ... the second time around. One - two and then ROCK ! One - two and then ROLL ! One - two and then RAKE ! It's good for your SOUL !  ~*Me*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Nan
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since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
OK, Martie - You can come rake mine too - Then we're off to the beach!! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
It seems you get lots of enjoyment from raking up leaves. James |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Gorgeous ..... You put spring in my heart today, Martie ..... |
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RAM Member
since 2000-03-24
Posts 153 |
"for the minute is crisp and going is not laced but silky with movement." awesome. yepr -- that's one rockin' rake. Rick |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Marge--Sometimes things are better the second time around. Nan--you gotta do your own raking, but the beach would be great! James--those internal leaves are the hardest to find, but they rake up great! Hi Shannon--so glad to see you here! Glad I brought you some sunshine. Rick--what an awesome word is awesome. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like this very much, Martie!!! (C'mon over and pull some weeds when you finish raking! *G*) |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
Beautiful! Just beautiful! Sigh. You keep on writing more and more lovely things - this is one of the many I wish I had written. So much feeling, and such exquisite analogies. The last verse is my favorite, and then, you pick an ending line that wraps it all up perfectly. Bravo! ...Living is ever like crossing rivers; finding a new life on each shore ... RJG |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
suthern--I'm on my way Rosemary--A compliment from you, gracious poet friend, is wonderful, a bravo, makes my day. |
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