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~The Things They Cant See~
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~The Things They Cant See~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
~The Things They Cant See~ She has everything I want and she's all I'll never be, and she takes it all for granted while I stand jaded in my envy. What makes her so blind, there is so much of you she cant see, I'd die to know this subtle sensuality and to make your discoveries. I see your situation and the place she keeps you in, in this game of pain ... neither heart will win. Don't misunderstand me ... you don't have to explain or confess, I understand completely ... you see I'm living in the same distress. But I'm not without compassion, I have been in her place, sometimes shadows follow us, memories time cant erase. Still I find my consolation in the losses of her circumstance, loneliness and longing creates the need for temporary romance. Momentary distractions give brief comfort and aid, I'm trying not to feel guilty ... they didn't keep the promises made. You see in me ... what she cant see in you, these things we have in common, are what divides lives in two. The rule "we only want what we don't have" ... seems to be true, all I want ... is for them to see in us -- all the things I see in you. I know there are two sides to every story ... something to defend, but all I ever wanted was a lover who would still be my friend. She has everything I want, and she is all I'll never be ... with the exception perhaps, of eyes that receive. He was all I ever wanted ... yet he looks right thru me, all my gains and losses are found in the things they cant see. janet marie and you can say baby... baby can I hold you tonight maybe if told you the right words... at the right time, you'd be mine... baby can I hold you tonight... tracy chapman |
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endoftheriver New Member
since 2000-03-16
Posts 6 |
we only get to keep what we take care of? |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Janet Marie, you've done it again! Thanks. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Well done Janet! This is unfortunitly "the same old story" for so many people we care about or happen to cross in life. Very nicely written. Marina |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
WOw Janet, this is a powerful piece and one that speaks deeply to me. Nice job  |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
She has everything I want, and she is all I'll never be ...with the exception perhaps, of eyes that receive. He was all I ever wanted ... yet he looks right thru me,all my gains and losses are found in the things they cant see. So powerful and so very.....REAL. You once again touch on feelings that elude my own words and touch my heart. What a gift you have to capture it all in one place. **AWH's sister of my soul*** Whatever strength I add to myself becomes my greatest weakness, while whatever weakness I'll consciously endure will be replaced with a strength that is not my own. G. Finley |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice Janet..."but all I ever wanted was a lover who would still be my friend." And I'll go one more...the second thing I wanted was a friend to be my lover. James |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Janet Marie~ Really a pensive piece from you. 'sometimes shadows follow us, memories time cant erase' 'I know there are two sides to every story ... ' Understanding *hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Enola Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 138England |
Still I find my consolation in the losses of her circumstance, loneliness and longing creates the need for temporary romance. Are you telepathic? I've experienced this many times. I completely indentify with this poem, it's so thruthful. And excellently written. The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
-Janet- found another one i can so relate to! You see in me ... what she cant see in you, these things we have in common, are what divides lives in two. The rule "we only want what we don't have" ... seems to be true, all I want ... is for them to see in us -- all the things I see in you. I know there are two sides to every story ... something to defend, but all I ever wanted was a lover who would still be my friend. Your entire poem was wonderful and really spoke to me...but these three stanzas right here captured it all! It would be so wonderful if we could have a lover and friend all together. Thanks for sharing this..made me ponder about life for a while. Amy ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Janet Marie, you've certainly struck a chord in many people with this poem...that is the mark of a good poet. Nicely done, Miss. |
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