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The Effect of Deep Affection
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The Effect of Deep Affection |
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AndreaA02 New Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 8Corpus Christi, TX |
"The Effect of Deep Affection" The worst of thoughts race through my head On the outside everything seems alright But on the inside a part of me is dead Who ever knew love could effect me so much? I find myself trying to remember your voice And I'm forever lingering for your touch "Worthless" is a new name you've given my feelings It's quite clear that I come around every few days only to impose on your dealings On your side of all this confusion there's no comprehension If ever I were to go back to you Our love would be a contradiction "Our love"? Yes, I know it's a lie I still remember when the truth became all too clear You wouldn't even hold me as I started to breakdown and cry Now it's been a while since we last met Still my heart hold so much love, hurt, and regret I know you see me standing in the threshold of your home And there's no mistaking that look in your eyes; You'd rather be alone Your phone rings and there's no hesitation or shame I only hope she's aware of what I now know... With all the great feelings of being loved and wanted... Soon will come an overwhelming amount of pain By Andrea Aguirre [This message has been edited by AndreaA02 (edited 03-21-2000).] |
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mete out Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 270england |
***Andrea, I know this feeling well...of loss and of hurrt, but believe me, it WILL pass... Welcome to Passions, you will be looked after here by all. A fantastically emotional first post.  I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very enjoyable to read...especially liked.."Worthless" is a new name you've given my feelings" and "Now its been a while since we last met..Still my heart holds so much love, hurt, and regret." That is a fantastic line. James |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
We only learn from our mistakes...welcome to the family.... Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Andrea~  Enjoy the hearts that live here. We welcome you with open arms. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
None of us is immune to the effects of love... You say it well, Andrea - Welcome to Passions. Check your email for a special greeting..  |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Welcome to Passions, Andrea! This is an excellent expression of your feelings. Well done! Denise |
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MyPenNameIsSam Member
since 2000-03-06
Posts 94usa |
I love those lines... "And there's no mistaking that look in your eyes, you'd rather be alone" and "I still remember when the truth became all too clear, you wouldn't even hold me as I started to break down and cry". So descriptive... reminds me all too much of the last relationship I was in... sad, but you'll get through it!  And welcome to Passions! We'll support ya and help ya out if you need anything! Thanks for sharing your poem!-molly aka sam Fleeting World "Thus shall ye think of all this fleeting world: A star at dawn, a bubble in a stream; A flash of lightning in a summer cloud, A flickering lamp, a phantom, and a dream." -from the Diamond Sutra, translated by : A. F. Price -- found in Teachings of The Buddha, edited by Jack Kornfield |
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AndreaA02 New Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 8Corpus Christi, TX |
Much appreciation to all that have left a response. I have never let anyone read my poetry and I am thrilled to see that there are people that enjoy it. I was afraid that maybe I didn't have the talent to write. Now I see that when words truly come from the heart, they can never go wrong. Thank you all for leading me to this conclusion. ~Andrea |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Welcome to passions |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Andrea, Welcome to Passions...a haven for the weary. Excellent poem...I agree with James, fantastic line. Wow. Friends are friend forever if the Lord's the Lord of them and a friend will not say never cause the welcome will not end. --Michael W. Smith |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Very nice first poem. I agree with other comments made about the impact of some of the lines. Good rhyme also. I commented on your second poem also. Welcome. A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family! A lot of sad feeling in this one......  |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
This person doesn't deserve you, remember that! Nice poem, too, and welcome to passions! Corinne |
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