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christies heart
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0 posted 2000-03-20 05:59 AM


He is so young, he sleeps now, rested.
Two parents stand over him, helpless, alone.
The silence peaks in this ever shrinking room,
which for the next few weeks, becomes his home.

The mother wonders of her fated life, her only son
being left here in this hospital room.
The father can't help but look towards her with
blame,after all, the kid comes from her womb.

The boy, thirteen, doesn't mind the place.
yeah it's cold; it smells sort of too clean.
The answer comes in feelings not words;
at least it's safer than any place else he's been.

The Father, still spinning the arrow of blame,
checks the clock with a resentful sigh.
This kid's no good, bringing knives to school.
Wait till they let him out, he's gonna die!

The Mother, wishing well for her boy, cannot
help but see her husband's rage coming undone.
Better they go, there's some stash in the car.
They'll come back tommorow to visit their son.

She needs a fix, he needs to fix it all.
What of this young boy's basic needs?
They lie lost now with the needs of the other boys
who live alone in hospitals that smells too clean?

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 Grant that I may not judge my niegbor until I have walked a mile in his moccasians

Native American prayer






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Rosalind Palafox
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1 posted 2000-03-20 08:01 PM


clean????? (nice story)-well sad actually

 "Love knows hidden paths."-German proverb

Janet Marie
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2 posted 2000-03-20 08:06 PM


WOW, christie, this poem just blew me away...you drew the imagery so painfully and with such an edge of realism...this is exceptional work. truly, take a bow.(SMILE)
take carem jm

 and you can say baby...
baby can I hold you tonight
maybe if told you the right words...
at the right time,
you'd be mine...
baby can I hold you tonight...
tracy chapman



Meadowmuse
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3 posted 2000-03-20 11:32 PM


So continually sad. Such a strong message, Chris. Parents feeling hopeless, for themselves and their children, so they turn it off, tune it out, turn him loose. Good writing, dear.

~ Claire

christies heart
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4 posted 2000-03-21 08:53 AM


RP..Thanks for commenting. To clear up the "Clean" part of the poem, the key words are supposed to be "smell" and "too" clean. The point I was sort of trying to get at was that, while the hospital may be anything but clean, the over use of hospital cleaning supplies is something like the a families overuse of the the hospital in attempt to find a quick fix. Does that make any sense. It was sort of a stretch, I guess!  

Janet Marie, Thank you sooo much again for you sweet and kind feedback. Did someone in my family pay you to boost my self esteem??



Meadowmuse...Thanks. This subject is so sad and I have experiece (sort of) from both sides. I have been part of the "hospital" and a parent of a child who suffers such issues (but thankfully has not needed the hospital). There are so many aspects of this issue that intertwine!

 Grant that I may not judge my niegbor until I have walked a mile in his moccasians

Native American prayer



hoot_owl_rn
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5 posted 2000-03-21 10:49 AM


WOW!!!
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

6 posted 2000-03-21 04:33 PM



why no chris, my poetic pal...no one pays me to read your poems...I am drawn to them..as I find So much of me in them...the things we have in common...I am most pleased if my replies boost you and make you smile...
on the other hand...should anyone in your family feel the need...
I accept checks, credit cards, and cash...
thanks of your understanding and sweet words to my poem today...
take care, jm


 and you can say baby...
baby can I hold you tonight
maybe if told you the right words...
at the right time,
you'd be mine...
baby can I hold you tonight...
tracy chapman



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