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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704
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We grew the you and I of us like the lily fragrant and short our time but a fragment I could have held a fallen pearl of dew in the cusp of my palm lines for longer than your mouth fell under my eyes from spilt words sundered glance we watched the wilt now you are not the treasure of my vision I am blind you said heroes move out from castles and gardens chase the dragon so any moist wind I fight it is only the breath of a beast behind the lilies rise in the waters rendering you I am but a fragment how does an air wisp raise a sword? |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Severn You conjure up phrases from your brilliant mind that throw perfect images into mine. And I am stunned. Superb writing, as I expected Liz |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Kamla, Again you leave me in awe .... Excellent verse dear one ... Love ya, Shannon |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Another great one, Severn! Corinne |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Girlie! Girlie, girlie...You are amazing! This poem is heartbreaking and wistful, and just simply wonderful (of course, you wrote it!). I love your formatting, it lends so much to this piece...makes for a perfect read a'loud.  Keep it up, my friend!N May I never be too busy to help another's load, Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed. --Author Unknown |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow! Love that last line... It seems impossible but you know there has to be a way, deep down. This was soft and beautiful, Severn. Loved it. Michael |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
OUTSTANDING creation! Bravo....Bravo! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Little One~ This is sheer beauty. Your mind works in light that brings your words to life. The formatting is exquisite and feathers the piece. Wonderful, Kammie. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Beautiful, Kamla. From the title, I was afraid it was about that thing growing on my neck but I'm happy to see it was another wonderful poem from your ever-filled pen! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful, Kamla! Gracefully flowing thoughts! Denise |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Soul-Sis, you always leave me in awe of your poetry, another of your beautiful pieces! loved it. *hugs*What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Raintime New Member
since 2000-01-31
Posts 3New York |
Another intricate navigation around the poles of time and memory, love and dissapointment. Any criticism I might have of the particulars is silenced by the total effect. A wonderfully evocative piece. Thank you. R.T |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Very, very nice, Severn.... I truly enjoyed this one....  ... Just like all the rest.. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Severn, Wonderous words, each one your pen. I kiss you hand, I love your zen. *L* Sy |
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