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Day Drifting
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Day Drifting |
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jbowie Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 135BANGOR (that OR) ME |
Wheeling around in concentric spirals, motion seeming imperceptibly slow, fish drift among outstretched arms of buoyant plants that curl and grow towards the warmer surface waters Wind blown waves caress the shore beyond the reach of the water bound plants, splashing upon thirsty reeds of late summer grass, flowing into the soil or wisping unseen into the air Coiling invivibly, the mist twists and turns in breezing currents ascending the aging oak flowing around the waving leaves that shade the cool denizens resting below Rolling over on his back, a young dog lays among the few glitters of sun penetrating the generous canopy of leaves above, thinking only of the boy scratching his flared ears And I, resting from a beleaguered day among the throngs in the hard, sharp corned cement encased city, enjoy restfully petting my dog while letting the day float quietly away A real man kisses his children goodnight |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi jbowie, This is a wonderful poem, I love the part about the dog rolling over and the boy scratching his ear and the sun filtering throught the tree,s. Thank you for the read, Cerenity |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
There's a symbiotic relationship if I've ever seen one.....  |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
What a wonderful flavor this poem has. Been there, done that and your words bring it back in a wonderful way. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
James, this I think is my favorite of yours to date. WOW! What a vivid scene you have painted here! Denise |
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jbowie Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 135BANGOR (that OR) ME |
Cerenity- thanks and everone knows I write best when it involves a dog(check out my silliness in the prose section) Nan- How else could it be for me? Balladeer- dogs always pull at the heart strings Denise- well I guess I should write some more dog poems. Thank you for the WOW |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
And I, resting from a beleaguered day among the throngs in the hard, sharp corned cement encased city, enjoy restfully petting my dog while letting the day float quietly away Absolutely excellent - and this ending just makes the poem. Wonderful stuff. 'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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jbowie Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 135BANGOR (that OR) ME |
severn- thanks for that reply, and you know I started off with only those four lines and said "man I need to write a poem for this" |
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