Open Poetry #6 |
I lost my appetite |
Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
I lost my appetite your words are now flat empty devoid of flavor no salt to burn the wounds I hide so carefully no spices to inflame my senses and set fire to my soul no moisture to make me thirst for quenching but oh oh what they used to be… your alphabet usage was a culinary delight each letter round and plump, each word tasty, delectable seasoned with just enough adjectives, peppered with perfect punctuation your verbiage moist and juicy I couldn't wait to eat I couldn't get my fill… what happened? I don't understand this lack of wanting. I am still me and you are still wonderful but now you create for someone I could never be and I am left with the crumbs of yesterday's desserts I numbly nibble failing to find my familiar fix the staleness saddens my soul its not the same and I I seem to have lost my appetite |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is great Corazon! I can relate to this! Well done! Denise |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Well, your words have certainly not lost any flavor. This poem is a culinary delight....and roasted to perfection. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
How wonderfully someone can season our lives and make every day delicious... and how dry as dust the taste of mornings without them. *S* This is great, Corazon! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Corazon you are writing the most lovely poetry I have ever seen you write...you are so in touch with your heart and your feelings. Sorry that this is a sad time for you now. Take care. James |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Fantasic work of art! Corinne |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Menu madame??? Garcon!! Garcon!! a menu for the lady please... Very well served Corazon very well served... |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks all for the affirmation that I haven't lost my taste for writing lol...these bloody eyes are so tired from working on my web page that I want to drive home with my eyes closed...lol *that's a smile for each of you in case no one reads insanity* |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I enjoyed the taste of this poem--I think you made it well done. |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
Interesting poem~ And interesting name~ Corazon means 'heart' in Spanish~ Marie~ "Love looks not with the eyes, but with the mind; And therefore is wing'd Cupid painted blind." The Bard |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
martie...thanks marie...I know, that's one of the reasons I chose it |
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