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MyPenNameIsSam
Member

since 2000-03-06

Posts 94
usa

0 posted 2000-03-13 05:44 PM

Fatal

Fatal flares
Explore our brains
As lethal dares
Destroy our veins
While gun shot wounds
Cause pain and trial
We ourselves
Are in denial
We again
Corrode Corruption
While we bathe
In crude abductions
Many people
Many places
Die behind our
Hollow faces.

"One does not discover new lands without consenting to lose sight of the shore for a very long time." -Andre Gide

Nurse Crachet
Member

since 1999-09-27

Posts 318
They know where I am!

1 posted 2000-03-13 05:52 PM

This is excellent, I liked the way you expressed this poem.

Denise

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

2 posted 2000-03-13 08:12 PM

I agree. Powerful writing. Well done!

Denise

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

3 posted 2000-03-13 08:19 PM

Sam~
Quite a powerful poem.
Well done.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Danny Holloway
Member Elite

since 2000-01-15

Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK

4 posted 2000-03-14 11:18 AM

I agree with the others. Very good writing.

Marina
Member Elite

since 2000-02-10

Posts 2245
Pickering, Ontario

5 posted 2000-03-14 12:20 PM

This truly is a very powerful piece. There is a very good lesson in this also. Excellent work!

Marina

Miss.Queeny
Junior Member

since 2000-02-26

Posts 22

6 posted 2000-03-14 01:46 PM

What can I say that they haven't ? This is a great poem, very powerful and truthful.

Love, Peace and Apathy...MISS xxx

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

7 posted 2000-03-14 08:56 PM

Excellent Sam!!

You have captured it all in this one. . .very powerful and to the point!

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

mariee66
Senior Member

since 2000-01-30

Posts 596
Recess, OfYourMind

8 posted 2000-03-14 09:15 PM

Molly, this is so well versed~
What a great and forceful piece~
Marie~

"Love looks not with the eyes, but with the mind;
And therefore is wing'd Cupid painted blind." The Bard

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

9 posted 2000-03-14 09:34 PM

I gotta be an echo here...with powerful and well done.

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