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Joannak
Member

since 2000-03-11

Posts 121
Indiana, USA

0 posted 2000-03-11 11:56 PM

Lightning, white-hot flash.
Hearts pounding, breathing quickens.
Suddenly, release.

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

1 posted 2000-03-12 12:19 PM

Joannak, this is wonderful, enjoyed it.

What comes from the heart goes to the heart.
Samuel Coleridge

EagleScorpion
Senior Member

since 2000-03-08

Posts 1644
Here, Now, Forever

2 posted 2000-03-12 01:46 AM

I never really understood a Haiku. I am not too fond of the 5-7-5 limitation.. Yet, yours is still a shocker

INclan
Senior Member

since 1999-07-20

Posts 1024
Indiana, USA

3 posted 2000-03-12 07:45 AM

Joannak,

VERY nicely done. I am particularly fond of Haiku. I enjoy the challange of packing as much meaning as possible into the minimum of words. I see that this is your first poetry posting with Passions. Welcome! You have set a high standard for yourself. I look forward to reading more.

INclan

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

4 posted 2000-03-12 09:26 AM

JoannaK~
Welcome to Passion's.
I like this Haiku.
You've done this well.

And after the lightning ......

Thunder rolls within
Chasm of earth filled with sound
Thunder resounding

~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

5 posted 2000-03-12 10:39 AM

Wow...what a great haiku...welcome to passions

Joannak
Member

since 2000-03-11

Posts 121
Indiana, USA

6 posted 2000-03-12 03:04 PM

Thanks all for the welcome.
First times are a challenge, and I enjoyed the experience.
Dark Angel, Eagle, INclan, Marge and hoot, thanks for the encouragement.

Joanna

Gene
Senior Member

since 2000-01-23

Posts 935
Colorado, USA

7 posted 2000-03-12 05:55 PM

Joanna,

Welcome to Passions. Great first post.
I've been trying to get some Haiku going in the Corner Pub. Please drop by we'd love to have you.

Share a little brew,
give us a haiku or two;
let's get this going.

~Gene

Denise

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

8 posted 2000-03-12 07:42 PM

This is wonderful, Joannak! I enjoyed this!

Denise

Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

9 posted 2000-03-12 07:46 PM

Hot Haiku!

Corinne

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