Open Poetry #6 |
The Fight of Meadow and Lug Nut (rewritten) |
Martie
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The Fight of Meadow and Lug Nut Even though he was tightening lug nuts his thoughts leaned against a tree in mountains far away, sitting so still that life went about daily tasks. A cottontail dislodged rotting leaves stopped and sniffed, scratched a soft, pink ear and disappeared behind a log. Purple Lupine caught the air to dance in a spot of sun. California poppies littered the slope beside the trail. The sound of water was everywhere. Three quail bobbing their heads in unison, their pointed feather hats erect, marched with purpose towards the sound. In the garage the air was stiff with the smells of gasoline and oil when a shadow fell across his vision and his heart moved from the peace place and skipped and jumped him a warning. Slouched in front of him was a man with mean eyes. The man’s face contorted then dislodged a sound, belched an acid laugh into the garage. It echoed unpleasantly across the meadow where the mule deer, squirrel and black bear roamed and a dark and menacing cloud formed over the sun dappled place of poppies and lupine. When he saw the intent that waited in those eyes, his hands became fists and he watched as the lug nuts rolled across the floor and settled. Then, a question came up from inside the cave where the sleeping bear had wintered and the question was hungry for answers. He searched the verdant grass and the trail that looped from years of thirst, towards the river that flowed in moving crystal light. He followed it across the years into the man made lap of knowledge that brought pipe and hoses to desperation and he knew the answer. The answer was a civilized thing and it dripped now into his anger where violence waited to lunge with the full black weight of its hunger fed by his father’s words, echoed through generations of fathers and sons, "Be a man." He heard his father’s voice softening with the opening of his hands and his father’s name for courage gave up and settled into whispers as the mean eyes became confused, tension slumped and defused and a sigh emptied into the garage, lingered a moment then disappeared. |
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Denise
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Excellent, Martie! Wonderful writing! Denise |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
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Mesmerized would be the best way to describe reading your poetry. It is if I am being taken by the hand and allowed to enter a special place. |
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Martie
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Denise--you must know how much I appreciate your constant support. Mike--You say the nicest things, my friend. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
So descriptive it's like I am watching it not reading it |
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