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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California 
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WINDOW "PAINS" < !signature-->I stand at the window pane. It's so cold out here it burns. It just keeps pouring rain, I know I'm running out of turns. The tears, they flow as rivers From eyes welled within disgrace. Time never breaking the slivers Of ice set meek upon my face. But, God, to look upon her sorrow, I just want to scream desperately... "I'm here!, I'm here!" but then I know Where she is - she can't hear me. I have no way of reaching her, All hope dripping away, alas... She looks at me but then never Can quite see me through this glass. And I cry out to the heavens, Cause it's killing me inside. But the tears never serve to cleanse, With this invisible divide. Answer coming, a shameless tatter Of a love I just can't hide. A pane between that just won't shatter, Leaving us both on the outside. Michael Anderson For all behind was dark and drear, And all before was night and fear. How many hours of night or day In those suspended pangs I lay, I could not tell; I scarcely knew If this were human breath I drew. Lord Byron [This message has been edited by Michael (edited 03-12-2000).] |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Just Thought I'd throw one at you all before I left. I will see you all again on Monday. Have a wonderful weekend, everyone. I know I will. Michael |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wow! Those last two lines are killers! Loved this one.... Hope you have a great weekend take notes as I'm sure there will be lots of things going on....I've called the California National Organization of Women..told them to hide the single women as you and Chris will be on the loose!!!! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The tears, they flow as rivers From eyes welled within disgrace. Time never breaking the slivers Of ice set meek upon the face. But, God, to look upon her sorrow, I just want to scream desperately... "I'm here!, I'm here!" but then I know Where she is - she can't hear me. -------------- And I cry out to the heavens, Cause it's killing me inside. But the tears never serve to cleanse, With this invisible divide. Answer coming, a shameless tatter Of a love I just can't hide. A pane between that just won't shatter, Leaving us both on the outside. ------------- do you have a magic poetry invention...some mystical machine that creates amazing poems hour upon hour??? "me thinks" yes... you should get a patent for it... call it M's heart...(smile) another painfully gorgeous poem. take care, jm |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wonderful poem Michael...well done  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Great poem, Michael! Denise |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Michael, I believe you have inspired me... Dying This morning, the air is chilly and I'm barefoot in the grass as he sits wondering at the window staring soulfully through the glass at my hardened stillness to see if he can understand what he gets for his love what he holds within his hand Does he see I'm dying does he realize that I'm weak no dew on blades this morning as no words I have to speak I'm fond of sitting, picking each blade and slicing it in half he sits warm where I used to be pondering how to make me laugh The roses long wilted still remain in a vase on the kitchen table he doesn't see it's me instead he creates a fable where the being of me lives and loves beyond the death but sifting through the blades of grass I search my final breath he's foolish behind the pane it's memory on which he's relying fingers falling, he never turns away but he doesn't see me dying. ~shadows dance by the light within~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I thought this one was great and didn't see why it was all da way at de end ....I'm gonna put it through again. Michael: nice format, rhyme scheme, and concept...I admire those who can do that. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
pdV, Had a wonderful weekend, thank you. Although I think Chris is developing an inferiority complex of sorts. He really really wished he could be me...I just can't figure that guy out...LOL Janet Marie, yeah, I got a machine and the sole patent on it as well. It's called acute chronic depression coupled with diabetes and an ever abusive, traumatic childhood forcing societal discomfort upon inner portions of the brain resulting in chemical imbalance that land me precisely on a fine fine line that lies just between creative genious and utter insanity! I'm selling it though, any offers? passing shadows, you read into this so well. And your poetic responce was so beautiful as well. I'm glad I could inspire such a poem out of you. Quite a compliment in itself. Thank you. Thank you all for the kind replies. Michael |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Funny, but i believe that you have several fans in the forum who have felt this same sentiment for you...and yes, me included. Love IS all around and it's Incredible Michael... |
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LittleBoyLost Junior Member
since 2000-03-14
Posts 28 |
Very touching, Michael. I liked what you did with "panes" and "pains". But like your other one this could be a lot better if you worked on the meter and didn't force the rhymes. This was still very touching. |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Good poem Michael I seem to have that too!! No... Wait.... Im missing the diabetes, no wonder my stuff comes out so crappy compared to you! I knew there has to be some reason! |
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Rose Red Junior Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 10scotland |
Michael love, I have glass cutters if you need them. *sigh* you are still my favourite poet of all time. Rose  |
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jbowie Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 135BANGOR (that OR) ME |
Your ability to turn these amazing poems out must be driven by something beyond mortal ken. I am impressed to say the least at how you can understand relationships so well and be able to write out why and what they mean to you. I know that reply is not the most astute but I just Wrelly likd Wht you rote |
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