Open Poetry #6 |
Sleeping Beauty |
Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Another day has come and gone. The moon is in full view. I lie in bed and marvel at The beauty that is you. I touch your cheek with gentle hand, Smile as my fingertips Trail slowly down to rest upon The fullness of your lips. Angelic in repose you are. Your face sets off a glow That only lovers who can give Their all will ever know. Your eyes, your ears, your nose, your lips Your cheeks, your brow, your hair Combine to make a masterpiece I find beyond compare. Although your face in stillness lay I see it as you smile I see it as you face the day In your own pixie style. I see it as you frown at all Injustice you may find I see it take angelic tones When you're just being kind. I see it as the teardrops fell When sadness came to call I see it pensive, lost in thought, I see it rise and fall. I think back to the golden days I thought would never pass When fingers slid down silky skin Instead of hardened glass. Our lives were filled with memories Impossible to keep. I gently lay your picture down And cry myself to sleep. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
ooh. Reads like chocolate. I could almost feel the crisp of the sheets and then-- I have been undone. Very Beautiful. very stirring... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh Balladeer....this is so sad but so well written |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Another great one, Balladeer... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Oh deer, you tricked me...I was so full of the wonder of the love you portrayed..and then, the cold glass of a picture...well, I for one, know how sweet memories can me.. Oh, by the way, I love your poem!!! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Balladeer~ Even with the twist ... it's exquisite poetry. The master story-teller has rested and come back with a fervor. Truly beautiful, my friend. Love ya' ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Baladeer, Fantastic, you never cease to amaze me. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Balladeer, there is nothing to say here but "Beautiful." ~ Claire |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is a real tear jerker, Balladeer. Very well done! Denise |
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Deb Lynne Member
since 1999-08-19
Posts 180Where blue skies meet blue ocean |
Another master piece, MM. |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
Wonderful poem Balladeer - you are very talented in your writings - I could learn much from your style Roniece |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Dear One....*tears* |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
I loved this. It went from love poem to dark in a matter of seconds, I loved the transition. |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Dang, here I thought, Balladeer how romantic! And then comes that twist your so famous for, and a crushing ending! YOUR BACK! EXCELLENT WORK! |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
"Angel in repose" - I love that... Heartwrenching work, Balladeer. Got me sniveling on this one. Beautifully done. Michael |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Thanks to you all for your warm comments. I had originally intended to write a simple, romantic poem but my O Henry chromosome kicked in and, well, this is what happens! Thanks for reading. |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
I loved this! Title fit it well! It was sad but romantic and beautiful! |
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Loneheart Member
since 1999-09-13
Posts 92Eastern US |
Truly wonderful Loneheart |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
very beautiful bal, how many a tear has been shed over the memories held in hand |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
An exceptional and beautiful piece Sir One of my favorites of your works .... |
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