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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
All that I have has been offered to you My body lifted up, presented to you Sacrifices, none too great to perform My offerings, in this way, will not harm Wrap myself in robes of white shimmering Underneath star filled sky glimmering Wreaths of holly planted upon my head To remain after robes of white I shed Bleeding sweat for every drop that I bled And standing grey as stone with arms outspread Encircled before flames consume me whole Transfixed, sacrificed to a higher goal I come and lay my body down by you For salvation, nothing I would not do |
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mystery Member
since 2000-02-21
Posts 79 |
Beautiful!, I would love for a man to want to sacrifice anything for me, it makes a person feel special to know that someone cares that much. I really enjoyed reading this. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Geesh Louise! Talk about being dedicated to a relationship! You are!  I love this whole setting you used here...encircled by flames, the offering, and all....very enchanting - and dark. Shall I say, *manly*.... LOL |
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Diana B Member
since 2000-03-10
Posts 97 |
i love the voice of this haunting so lovely |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Mystery - Thanks. But of course such a man (or woman) doesnt exist. Or do they...? Femme - Yes, you can say 'manly'. Diana B. - Thank you. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
All that I have has been offered to you My body lifted up, presented to you Sacrifices, none too great to perform My offerings, in this way, will not harm ---------- "I come and lay my body down by you For salvation, nothing I would not do" ----------- **SIGH** (catches her breath) well,... a girl cant ask for anything more than comsuming sacrifice and salvation... at least not this "brown eyed girl"...(smile) this poem literally takes my breath away... thank you...(smile) I remain...intrigued... stalking you always...your jm |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thank you, let me help you breathe again....*S* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
*SIGH* nope...still not breathing...may need m2m resuscitation (hehe) its even better at this hour...(smile) stalking you intensly... your jm Now for me some words come easy But I know that they don't mean that much Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch You never knew what I loved in you I don't know what you loved in me Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be jackson browne |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
*sigh*...again...(smile) just needed a little afternoon delight... and now ... oxygen...*sigh* stalking you always, jm Now for me some words come easy But I know that they don't mean that much Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch You never knew what I loved in you I don't know what you loved in me Maybe the picture of somebody you were hoping I might be jackson browne |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
just adding some old favorite archived poems to my private library file...a new feature on the site. |
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