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For The Fat Man
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For The Fat Man |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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It may be redundant but the talent's abundant-- he has what they're looking for. Sampling cremes chocolate supremes-- he's a fat man in a candy store. Searching for the piece not tasted nibbled morsels, lying wasted, smashed and scattered on the floor as the fat man eats some more. Cakes, cookies, riches divine, the fat man eats and wastes his time. Devouring sweets, he longs for meat-- to soak his fat tongue in fine wine. Fat man in a candy store can't find what he's hungry for... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Gosh...If it's really this bad, please somebody post some suggestions... There really was some thought behind this, but I guess I failed to convey it. Open to suggestions...Anyone? |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
I like this poem serenity I can read a lot into it and implant myself in its' interpretation ... except I'm on a steady diet ... but I like to read the menu  Rex}<{{{{o> [This message has been edited by Rex Allen McCoy (edited 02-11-2000).] |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Oh my...I think it is wonderful...and I'm ashamed to admit I giggled a bit...  ( then I realized it might be based on facts...I hope this was not a real life situation...for then I will feel worse.. Freedom of expression is the watch word... |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Yano, I would re-post this - to be honest it has a very strong message to send out, that they didn't get in 2000. I can see the crumpled wrappers actually, and they are many things. |
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