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Open Poetry #6

Corruption

MyPenNameIsSam
Member

since 2000-03-06

Posts 94
usa

0 posted 2000-03-09 01:30 PM

Corruption
-from 1993

Every time
I get some where
It turns around
Dissolves in space
It blows right back
Into my face
It stings my eyes
And causes hate
The hate then stings
My soul down deep
And causes
Strange convulsions seep
Into my mind
Into my brain
Until I can
No longer reign
Above my heart
Above my cries
Above my mighty wall
There lies
A hammer
Smashing
Crashing down
To crack
My precious
Wall surrounds
My soul's
Entire sobbing core
My fear
My love
My evermore.

poetFemmeFatale
Member Elite

since 1999-07-25

Posts 2646
Arkansas

1 posted 2000-03-09 04:01 PM

I like how this "fell down the page"....it gave an extra punch to the emotions that were banging loud as I read it. Very intense, and a good read!

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

2 posted 2000-03-09 04:10 PM

The flow of this poem is wonderful. Is this corruption some sort of temptation? I really enjoyed "Every time I get
somewhere...it turns around dissolves in space...It blows right back into my face...it stings my eyes and causes hate. James

MyPenNameIsSam
Member

since 2000-03-06

Posts 94
usa

3 posted 2000-03-10 12:15 PM

Thank you both

James,...
Well... I wrote this poem in late 1993, at the beginning of my freshman year in highschool... there was a lot going on in my life then and the "corruption" that I spoke of was more the way that my life seemed to be "snow-balling", if that makes any sense. This was a peak year in a lot of difficulty going on within my family and a peak in terms of how I dealt with those difficulties. It would take far too long to explain here, ... but thank you for asking

and I'm glad you both enjoyed my poem.
love,
molly aka sam

"One does not discover new lands without consenting to lose sight of the shore for a very long time." -Andre Gide

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