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angelswing
Senior Member

since 2000-02-10

Posts 705
United Kingdom

0 posted 2000-03-09 08:17 AM

Whirlpool gate .

Love is like a whirlpool,
It spirals fresh and new,
But the chances are it comes but once a life,
And wreaks havoc,
Destroys the true .
I have found my deepest dream,
My mind has found it’s ecstasy,
But now I find it’s all a lie,
A fraud,
A f*****d up fallacy .
This is why my mind can’t take,
Much more of this love or life,
When I am found to gaze up at you,
A dilemma and a strife .
I’ll love you more than any man can,
Or probably ever will,
If happiness was deepest love,
I’d be laughing,
Through and through .
My only dream and true desire,
Is if you would love me back,
In a world of dream and fantasy,
I know that for a fact,
You’d be my one,
My reality,
My holy righteous love,
The one for which I’d enter hell,
And try to bring you back .
Only now as I set sail,
On a course to peace,
And happiness,
I realise how incomplete,
The puzzle really is,
But how it’s all just true lies,
There’s no way back or forth,
The currents pull just leads me,
On and,
To my fated hour .
The act soon befalls my battered skull,
No flesh,
Defeated,
Sour .
This pain I know,
Just hasn’t changed,
Oh woe,
Oh woe,
Oh woe .
The spin sucks me up,
And breaks my ship in two,
How life has stormed my port,
And as I sink,
I find my mind in clear,
Uncanny thought,
In death I have all I want,
The calm,
The piece .
The sweat,
Pure icy blue .

Written by Tom Baker

With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one .

BluesforNarada
Junior Member

since 2000-03-02

Posts 13

1 posted 2000-03-09 08:23 AM

Great poem Tom. It just shows people how fickle love can be. If no one can love and no one can lust, how can people live on in their lives? Keep up the good work - you're an inspiration to us all.

mete out
Member

since 2000-02-16

Posts 270
england

2 posted 2000-03-10 04:50 AM

***Tom,
Fantastic mate.
I really love ths one...you speak so much truth in your poems it astounds me...you are wise beyond your years.
I am also confident that you will find true happiness....you most certainly deserve it..
love lou xxx

I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.

Enola
Member

since 2000-02-11

Posts 138
England

3 posted 2000-03-10 05:09 AM

Tom - you've out done me, yet again! I ask you, how on earth am I supposed to compete with that? You keep saying that you're good at nothing - you are SO wrong! I believe you have finally found your vocation. This is so good, I don't know why I bother.

The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition.

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

4 posted 2000-03-10 05:20 AM

Ouch - heartfelt stuff here.

sympathies and empathies coming your way...

'Writing sharpens life;
life enriches writing'
Sylvia Plath

infinat3 sadn3ss
Member

since 2000-02-14

Posts 85
somerset england

5 posted 2000-03-10 07:17 AM

hi bake ,
i read this the other day and i just thought id reply today to proclaim how good it was . keep going , you are on your way to being a great poet (not that you arent one already) . well done
cabes

angelswing
Senior Member

since 2000-02-10

Posts 705
United Kingdom

6 posted 2000-03-13 10:36 AM

Many thanks to you all, I am pleased that you liked it, and you all are at least as good as I am, because we all have a few things in comon, thanks for your inspiration. Keep writing more of your wounderful poems, so that I can read them and feel good inside .
Tom.
-x-

angelswing
Senior Member

since 2000-02-10

Posts 705
United Kingdom

7 posted 2000-03-13 10:36 AM

Many thanks to you all, I am pleased that you liked it, and you all are at least as good as I am, because we all have a few things in comon, thanks for your inspiration. Keep writing more of your wounderful poems, so that I can read them and feel good inside .
Tom.
-x-

With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one .

angelswing
Senior Member

since 2000-02-10

Posts 705
United Kingdom

8 posted 2000-03-15 10:21 AM

Hey Kev, welcome to the family of friends, I wait with great expectations to read your poem that you have written, get it up hear as soon as possible .
Tom .

With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one .

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