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| Open Poetry #6 |
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A Certain Perfect Disarray |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Apple-mint sprigs, tiny leaves unfold to sun in ancient prayer-- (supplication...) Ever strives to meet perfection... (daily dedication...) Lemon tree in bloom this year. How perfectly ironic. Blossoms fall--lemon drops-- Heady scent--seductive tonic-- a certain perfect disarray... think i'll let it stay that way... (Some things should be just what they are.) Broad-leaf fern, pine-apple sage, rose-in-bud, "Society's Page," (she used to be all the rage.) spears of iris by the pond and just the slightest curve of palm behind the waterfall-- White ginger standing tall... and pots of basil hunger for planting bringing out an ache in me-- ever wistful--ever wanting-- a shovel full of upturned earth droplets of rain, quenching thirst. "Gentle hands are needed here," said the breeze into my ear. "Ssshh..." It whispered me aware. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Oooh, what a mystifying poem...lovely ending. All this talk of pineapple and such made me hungry though - guess I oughta go eat some breakfast, huh? Grreat poem! Michael |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
"It whispered me aware".....beautiful darling! I really like your style of writing! Very refreshing! I too, am hungry now, and am wanting to go outside and garden for some reason! ROFL  |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
What beautiful imagery! Incredible. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Your writing here unveils the ready newness of spring's giftings...wonderful poem! ~ Claire |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I think I'll go to the garden too--what a lovely look through your eyes. Enjoyed the view! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Oooh! Made Michael say "oooh!" Incredible... a smiling serenity hugs herself... pFF- how well you seem to understand me! thank you! Poet deVine-- always an honor-- Thanks to you also, the lovely Claire... Martie, you are welcome in my garden anytime. Thanks all... |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Serenity - this is just excellent...it is so tight (my word for a poem that flows like water), well done, well done! Lemon tree in bloom this year. How perfectly ironic. Blossoms fall--lemon drops-- Heady scent--seductive tonic-- a certain perfect disarray... love it!  'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is so beautiful, Serenity! Very well done! Denise |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Severn- thank you so much for adding to my already abundant joy with your reply. Denise- I owe you such a debt of gratitude-- your support gave me the confidence to keep posting (I know it sounds ludicrous, but i am actually quite shy...) Thanks again to all, this one was a joy to share...Now GO PLANT SOMETHING! ( but let's keep an eye on Marge and Seymour...) |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Not too shy to post this greatly odiferous poem! Well done serenity, me likes berry much! |
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bboog Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303Valencia, California |
Serenity, I liked this work, but kept wondering to myself what season it was. It seemed kind of summery with lemon blossoms dropping and their "heady scent" yet it seemed to also hint of spring with the "spears of iris" by the pond. Forgive me for being thick, but could you clarify this for me? oh, and i still liked it best regards, bboog |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Christopher, me berry happy to hear from you! Thanks... bb----I live in New Orleans, sub-tropics here, we do not actually have winter, we have a series of "cool fronts". So yes, not only is it possible, it is happening, and to my joy, right in front me very eyes. (Note I've said nothing about my heat-loving Hibiscus, daisies, and all-time favorite, my beloved zinnias...) |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
The poem is exquisitely refreshing in it's style. What an excellent manner of construction and combination of imagery. I love it |
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