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Beneath the Rain
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Beneath the Rain |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas 
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First, I must give credit where credit is due. Mr. Haley inspired this one...one of his poems had this fabulous line that just gripped me, and so I went with it. Thank you sir - I owe you one. pFF ~ Beneath the Rain ~ Pelting tears beneath the rain my silent scream I can't explain. My knees pulled to an empty chest I close my eyes they beg to rest... Freezing winds they whip my hair no emptiness can dare compare. Here am I beneath this rain my face is like a windowpane... Pelting tears are streaming down upon my soul I pray I drown. Are you out there - beneath this rain? Please dry me off and keep me sane... - poetFemmeFatale |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Ouch...... the storms of life can often bring us down. I enjoyed the look into your storm and am wishing more sunshine to calm the storm that rages before you. I found the meter to this like the pouring rain.....down and down it came |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Here's a dry towel for you, and I make pretty good potato soup too! HUGS to ya, and ooh, it DO get better. Powerful piece. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Wow, this poem I liked so much I'll have to look for the inspiration behind it! What was the title of the inspring poem? Elizabeth "He have his goodness now. God forbid I take it from him!" -The Crucible |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Perhaps an umbrella? Very powerful Femme. . . and I want to know where the inspiration came from too. . . ------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Oh Femme...why'd ya have to go and make me cry? (it's all right though) This hits far too close to home right now. Painfully sad and exellently written, I am impressed. *Krista Knutson* "Every moment marked with apparitions of your soul...." ~*Sarah McLachlan- Do What You Have To Do*~ |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Well Femme, I'm glad you liked that line, and an interesting and deeply sad direction its taken you. Wonderful poem though, sorry about where it took you..... Hugs! For those interested the poem is called "each and every time" found at your local Passions book store in the romance section. ..... I should get a job doing this. Parker |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
awww sis...need a hankey? Isn't about time for some Spring rains? I'll frolic if you will... |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
ROFL at Mr. Haley! hehe (he hates that I think - to be called Mr. )  Anyway, you should all go back and read his poem that he mentioned above, "each and every time"...it's in here, not too far away! It was an awesome piece, and that one line grabbed me and wouldn't let go! I really liked the idea of being *under* the rain. Yes, it sprouted a depressing piece from me, but that's okay! I don't mind the rain at times...it cleanses me. Thank you again James...  Serenity, Elizabeth, Alwye - It means alot to me to have you ladies replying still...Thanks a million! And to the gentlemen - Thanks for loaning me your hankey, umbrella, etc.!! You guys are the best! hehe I appreciate each and every one of you...you've kept me sane AND dry.... LOL |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
pFF~ this is great! Sad, but flowed wonderfully.  -SEA |
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angel girl Member
since 1999-07-23
Posts 322within a whisper... |
Oh, this is so good! One touch of nature makes the whole world kin. -William Shakespeare |
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MyPenNameIsSam Member
since 2000-03-06
Posts 94usa |
Wow...takes me back to many painful yet somehow comforting times in my life... I find the rain somewhat comforting but at the same time able to go with the frustrated mood... -molly aka sam "Always be willing to sacrifice what you believe, for the truth."-jps |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Femme~ You've still got it girl. Touching. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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