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The Essence of You
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The Essence of You |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678
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The Essence of You ~First Knight~ As I lay next to you and you looked at me. I felt the tingle of your stare and the heat of your skin. The folds of hair laying across your face with your head tilted so. You shared with me that smile that could stop a million tears. And your lips that could kiss a way a million more. A firm stroke as your hand passed in my hair, Your skin so milky white and pure as the sheets upon which we lay Eyes so clear and full of life. I still hear the echo of your laughter in my mind, your voice in the halls of my memory. Branded there with the essence of you, burned in with the fire of your love. I am forever marked and can see no other, for in your beauty I am ruined. No other could compare, and a sin it would be to try. [This message has been edited by First__Knight (edited 03-08-2000).] |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Oh this is so beautiful "for in your beauty I am ruined. No other could compare, and a sin it would be to try." This paragraph was excellent! |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
David~ Such lovely thoughts you pen. What beauty is held in your verse. The love wrapped in the lines are perfections of your heart. Good to see you, my friend. Sending lots of hugs your way. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
This is so Beautiful and yet beauty doesn't describe the feeling that you left me with with your poem. You have a gift of which I'm blessed to receive by reading the poetry that you write. |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Thank you so much Lost Dreamer What a way with words dear Marge. Nice to be seen  Thank you dear ladyButterfly....I am flattered so and am deeply honored at your words There are two kinds of pedestrians...the quick and the dead. Drive it like you stole it. |
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Enola Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 138England |
This is such an amazing poem, I think everyone else has already said is more than I could. The poem seems to me, to be as beautiful as the person you describe - if that is possible. The tragedy of it is that nobody sees the look of desperation on my face. Thousands and thousands of us, and we're passing one another without a look of recognition. |
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Nurse Crachet Member
since 1999-09-27
Posts 318They know where I am! |
Wow, I loved this poem, must be someone very special for you to write of such beauty. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
David...there is such beauty and passion in these words. It is truly a poem that comes from the heart. Wonderfully done. It's nice to see you back Ruth |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Rockin'! Ah, the power of an impression! |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
This is excellent David. She must be absolutely phenominal |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
This is so romantic, it is my favorite of all your poems, lovely! "Love is not love Which alters when it alteration finds, Or bends with the remover to remove. O,no! it is an ever-fixed mark....William Shakespeare |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Very beautifully written from a most sensitive heart, I think. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
A total tapestry of words. Beautiful, romantic, and so very touching...Applauding wildly here. |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Enola- Thank you so much Nurse- She is very special to me Hoot- Always a kind word Chris- Thank you MisticMan- She is simply devine...and I hope to meet her face to face one day and share this moment with her. Romantic Heart- I am glad you have enjoyed Martie- Thank you Serenity- What a wonderful thing to say....Thank you |
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MyPenNameIsSam Member
since 2000-03-06
Posts 94usa |
yes, this poem leaves one with a beautiful feeling. I loved those lines "You shared with me that smile that could stop a million tears....I still hear the echo of your laughter in my mind".... so well put. Beautiful. |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
"Forever marked, and can see no other..." Ouch...that is my problem exactly. Isn't it funny how someone can leave us searching for something that can never be found quite the same? My *mark* comes from almost 15 years back....that really bites! Beautiful poem sir...your heart is sincere, I feel it. |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Thank you Sam.... PFF- So very nice are your words and I am so glad you stopped by so I could share some of mine with you There are two kinds of pedestrians...the quick and the dead. Drive it like you stole it. |
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