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Open Poetry #6

Shall I Compare You?

bboog
Member

since 2000-02-29

Posts 303
Valencia, California

0 posted 2000-03-07 09:32 PM

Shall I compare you to a winter’s day?
You are more dark and full of misery.
Hunchbacked trees will never once complain
About the wind or snow or stormy sea.
But you? I think you’d want all of mankind
To feel the joy of a monthly tax bill.
Perhaps the problem is not in your mind
Just the mirror of time makes you ill.
The red-brown blossom with cuffless pants
Became a tree with an old gnarled hand.
Beauty lives by escaping. Take a chance
And let worry go. Soon you’ll understand
To make beauty grow in a lover’s heart
Give it some room or it will fall apart.

mete out
Member

since 2000-02-16

Posts 270
england

1 posted 2000-03-08 11:32 AM

***bboog,
I LIKE this one!
It's exeptionally clever and full of depth and beauty, despite the fact that you talk alot about ugliness.

Fantastic.

I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it.

Corazon
Senior Member

since 2000-02-02

Posts 1209

2 posted 2000-03-08 11:36 AM

love this...really great images

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

3 posted 2000-03-08 11:55 AM

Bboog~ who ever this is about, you don't sound too happy with them!

Great poem.-SEA

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2000-03-08 03:06 PM

Wonderful way to write about a person that is critical and dwells to much on the negative. I used to be like that. Beauty is in the eye of the beholder. James

bboog
Member

since 2000-02-29

Posts 303
Valencia, California

5 posted 2000-03-09 02:58 AM

To mete out: thank you for reading it! (and responding)
To Corazon: Thank you for reading it too.
To SEA: Thank you.
to jmlee12345: Thank you, thank you, thank you.
warmest regards,
bboog

Michael

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-13

Posts 7666
California

6 posted 2000-03-09 08:10 AM

Reminds me of an old song - "Hold On Loosely" - but don't let go. Indeed, you must give room. Wonderfully expressed words.

michael

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