Open Poetry #6 |
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Through the Cracks |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas ![]() |
"It's time," one said As I was chained hand and foot Led down the grey walk The room is too bright Eyes burned with afterimage Of a comfy chair Tubes and bottles wait Needled lines waiting for me Like transparent snakes In the dark they wait They, my final audience Come to see me die "Do you have last words?" As I am strapped to the chair Soft leather comfort The snakes bite my skin And the I.V. drip begins "I am Innocent!" The fire burns my veins And I look through the mirror At my audience Fading fast I hear The preacher intoning God Dying as they watch The audience cheers "Justice has prevailed!", although I was Innocent Alicat the Persnikitty As I sit here dimly thinking Watching modem lights a-blinking Churning out poetic hash. Lord, in all Your piety, Help me keep my sanity: Please don't let the modem crash! --Alicat |
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mete out Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 270england |
***Alicat, A fantastic poem. Deeply insightful... I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
A tragedy. I'm sure it happens more often than we realize. Well written, Ali! Denise |
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Saxoness![]()
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
well written indeed, and sadly portrayed. "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." -Charles Brugnot |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
I have to say I'm at odds with the death penalty although incidents involving children will always find me reversing that thought but there is a part of me that says...if we got it wrong, that is one decision that cannot be revoked and we do get it wrong from time to time and when there is an element of doubt...but then I see the death of an innocent child and I could murder someone myself...conflict, huh? HUGS |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Excellent writing in this poem, even though it is sadder than sad. I don't even know how people can watch someone get put to death like that. It would not give me peace even if the person murdered one of my family, I would feel as though I were a murderer. |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Geesh! This was a bit on the dark side....should you repost in *Dark*? LOL Good freaky poem ![]() ~X~ |
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SEA![]() ![]()
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Alicat~ Wow. Sounds almost as though you were looking inside yourself, maybe judging yourself. This is a great poem! ![]() |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is scary! It could happen too....good poem...is this dead poet walking? |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
Refreshingly original poem, Alicat. I liked the dialogue thrown in to make it impact harder on the reader. So dark, but true. Don't care what people say Just follow your own way Don't give up and use the chance To return to innocence. -Enigma |
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