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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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You You came with love and warmth You jumped into the tiny pool of love stored within my heart left there lonely, abused, neglected and pulled apart. Heated it through, and melted down the blood dripping icicles. Smoothed out all the Jagged edges and hammered out the indentations You polished the deep scratches gave to me divine inspiration and washed away the ashes from burned interrogation You cleansed my soul filling me with light with warmth and joy, with hope and with Love. Dark Angel 2000 What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 03-07-2000).] |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Maree, you have done so well with this - including the flow...  And I envy your format - it is wonderful. And these are the lines that get me: You jumped into the tiny pool of love stored within my heart left there lonely, abused, neglected and pulled apart. Well done sister mine.  K'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
This is lovely dark angel and I'm glad that you have a special "you". James |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
You wrote this beautifully, and captured the true essence of the saving grace of true love. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
This is wonderful! So hard to do and make it flow! Good job.  |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Maree, I am continually AMAZED at the way your words can not only sound wonderful, but LOOK wonderful as well. . . This again reminds me of the Concrete poetry of the 60's and 70's. . .and the words are indeed from the heart. . . Well put my friend. . . ---------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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monique Member
since 2000-02-03
Posts 369Louisiana |
It looks like a Christmas ornament If you were talking about Jesus Who shed His blood for us according to the bible It would be an appropriate analogy With the celebration of His birthday Bringing inner peace and love in this world You have the whole thing Wrapped up in this meaningful poem monique |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Sweet Butterfly, thanks so much. Thanks for your imput as well, I appreciate it. --------------- jmlee, thanks for your lovely reply. --------------- b_d_c, thank you so much for your lovely reply. ---------------- Sharon, thank you honey. ---------------- Why thank you Sven. ---------------- Monique, thank you. What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Nice, good formatting and clever thoughts! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This is wonderful. It reminded me of a big waterdrop in it's presentation and very fitting for the poem |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
hmm.. blood icicles..sucks being alone dosent it? |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Christopher, thanks so much --------------- Ruth, Thank you my dear friend. --------------- ES, Thanks What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
DA, you've been writing some of the finest darn poetry! I love this! The format and all, tis excellent!!! |
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