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I Slept with You last Night
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I Slept with You last Night |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
I Slept with You last Night It was quiet when we talked, alone. You and me in the evening glow I could even see a smile, In the luminescent light I really wanted to hold you But knew I could not, at least yet And your lips danced in my mind With every word, that you said You told of dreams and loss All those changes in your life And really, I listened very hard But all I could think of was a kiss You laughed at my simple jokes So sweet to humor me so And my heart would ache With every one of your smiles I touched your lips with my mind So soft and warm, as I thought I wanted more with every touch But was afraid that you would run When we lay down to sleep I just held you in my arms, kissed your shoulder and your neck and saw our future in my dreams. James Parker Haley Mar 8, 2000 [This message has been edited by Haleyja (edited 03-06-2000).] |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
this is so beautiful...really love it  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice writing. I think us poets can be very giving and understanding. I hope this works out for you. Sounds lovely. James |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Such tender thoughts James, and so well expressed. |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
Absolutely, positutely beautiful. Most women's desire, to be held in the arms of a man without complications, to sit and talk without worries. You have stated everything so perfectly. Ah, I miss those days... Don't care what people say Just follow your own way Don't give up and use the chance To return to innocence. -Enigma |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Sounds like a beautiful night James...these things really mean the most...you're quite a man!!!  Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
James this is perfect. It had a beautiful flow and such sincerity to your words. I might have get my kleenex box out yet. I liked the third verse the best. Marina |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
OK Buddy.....now you're really making things hard for the rest of us guys in here...all this talk of holding and kissing and snuggling...my wife is yelling in my ear right now..."WHY CAN"T YOU BE MORE LIKE THAT?!?!?" She wants me to print it out and hang it in the bedroom....LOL....j/k Very beautifully written piece James....very beautiful... Chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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Rosalind Palafox
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MemberPosts 88 |
NIce romantic poem... "Love knows hidden paths."-German proverb |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Parker~ Purrrrrrrr ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Thank you all for your comments. I'm just a hopefull romantic. Parker |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh Parker...I got to second Marge on this on. Heck with the stuff in the adult section, give me this anyday to get me heated up...lol. I've yet to decide whether I'm a hopeless romantic or just plain hopeless. Lovely poem here, got this girl sighing |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is romance at its finest! Well done! Denise |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
"When we lay down to sleep I just held you in my arms, kissed your shoulder and your neck and saw our future in my dreams" ...this is absolute beauty, Parker. ~ Claire [This message has been edited by Meadowmuse (edited 03-06-2000).] |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Very lovely, Parker! Corinne |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
hoot, Denise, Claire, thank you all..... and Corinne... a sweet thank you. Parker |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
The more I read it, the more I like it. She is a very lucky lady. Marina |
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Nurse Crachet Member
since 1999-09-27
Posts 318They know where I am! |
This poem would be a ladies dream come true. Something about the line, "I touched your lips with my mind" really got me, it sounded so beautiful, what a talent you have. I think it fair to say we all would love more. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
*sigh* This is beautiful and romantic...and all that mushy stuff. Wonderful poem, James... read like a breath of fresh air to me. Truly, the heavens are shining on you, my friend. michael |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
I like the way you wrote this totally without gender... gave it a more universal appeal... great! |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
This is so precise and with so much feeling, you captured the words of the heart with a breathtaking view. Thank you for allowing your gift to be shared. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
What a poet you are, Parker! Sung with an Irish lilt: Oh sail with me to County Cork, on a maiden voyage of gentle seas and run thru the mire and the mists, on a lover's mystical journey. Cor |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Marina, thank you again. Nurse Crachet, I will do my best to comply. Michael, I would love to say that that's 100 percent true. I keep a positive attitude toward the posibility. Only the future knows for sure, but I do believe that I am the crafter of my own destiny. Thanks for your kind words. Rebel, Oh, there was lots of gender involved, but I can see your point, from the readers perspective. Thanks Butterflies_dont_cry, thank you for reading. Corinne, You do the singing, and I'll buy the tickets. Have you sung many celtic songs? Celtic music is very popular up here these days. Its so alive. There was a musical up here called River Dance, that I missed. Just, waiting for it to come back. I'm sure it was Celtic. Thanks for your sweet reply. Parker |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
This is beautiful, so tender, so Romantic! Well Done. What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
The title caught my eye, and the poem caught my heart, very classy and romantic. I love the detail and the way you express yourself. Very open and real! "Love is not love Which alters when it alteration finds, Or bends with the remover to remove. O,no! it is an ever-fixed mark....William Shakespeare |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Dark Angel and A Romantic Heart, thank you very much for reading and liking. parker |
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