Open Poetry #6 |
Fly Upon the Wall |
Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Upon this wall I perch Seeing and hearing all For her beauty I search My heart it does enthrall Seeing that which I cannot touch At times it seems too much Why am I forbidden in her world She made mine become unfurled So I sit here and observe As she smiles and laughs How could she have the nerve? I feel she is my other half So I sit here, watching from a distance Her unaware of my existence Completely removed from her life Forced to sit back and watch with strife Seeing her happy without me Makes me want to crawl Over to her and voice my plea But alas, I am just a fly upon the wall |
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busylisa_ca Junior Member
since 2000-03-01
Posts 39 |
Excellent poem. Don't feel so bad because you are not the only person who has experienced this. Look ahead to the future and you will no longer feel like a fly on the wall! from busylisa |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Oh Jeeze that is a painful place to be. hard not to just fly off that wall and pester the heck out of them too, I bet. Can relate, Mistikman. Good poem. michael |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Well done...and a hurtful situation to be sure. Nicely expressed. 'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Interesting rhyme scheme..and a good poem. Keep your chin up or someone will swat that fly on the wall! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Mistik, I know how ya feel |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
You caught me with this title...I've often wanted to be a fly on the wall...but in this case, not a good thing to be, eh? |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
busylisa_ca- The future is hard to see when all I can see is her... Thank you... Michael- Oh don't I know it. I used to talk with her all the time, but I agreed to stop trying to get her to like me, because it was hurting her every time she rejected me, so now all I can do is sit back and watch her enjoy life... Thank you... Severn- Thank you Poet deVine- It would be grande if someone would swat me and put me out of this misery, heh. passing shadows- Thanks hoot_owl_rn- Oh, it feels like about the worst place to be right now. I have the same Calculus class as her, so I anticipate and dread going there. I want to see her, but I know seeing her hurts more than anything else. Thank you. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Mistik, you keep making me think of the poems I've written... Sometimes It Hurts sometimes it hurts to look at you knowing you won't love the way I do but still seeing something you don't want me to see like maybe you want but just can't love me sometimes it hurts to sit beside you drawn in too quickly, too deep inside you knowing how wrong it is to be inside of a world that isn't free sometimes it hurts to think about you when I sit in the darkness alone without you and want so badly for you to come to show me where I can get light from sometimes it hurts but other times it doesn't sometimes I think it was when it wasn't or I think it wasn't when it was but I'll keep holding on because there's no other like you near or far I like these things the way they are I say I'll leave but you know I won't sometimes it hurts...sometimes it don't. ~shadows dance by the light within~ |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
passing shadows- And again words fail me. Thank you. Your responses to me are no short of excellent |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Funny I should find this poem here, after just the other day reading about fly spies, the future of spie tactics and thinking how I had often wished to be a fly on the wall but thinking in reality this might not be such a great thing. Next thing we know we might even be allowed a private thought, and that is scary.. |
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Mistikman Senior Member
since 2000-01-10
Posts 682San Jose, CA, USA |
Septsong- Well, im not really talking about spying or anything like that. I am talking about being forced into that position, where I am not allowed to take part in her life, and all I can do is watch from a distance. Thanks anyway though |
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